I gotta be honest with you: Ihad to stop reading after chapter 30. I kind of pushed myself to read until then. But damn .
You had such a great set up. Really. I loved the beginning, kept waiting for Gerard to find out, kept waiting for more complications from Lilly. And I got nothin'.
And you know what else? I thought for sure that Gerard's dad would be Frank's dad too. Some kind of illicit-romance spawned Frank and through fate's nasty little mindgames, he and Gerard fell in love. And he hid the fact that they were brothers until they were way deep into it. And Gerard would leave and then they'd get back together, deciding that it just doesn't matter.
Actually, that'd make a great Waycest. You have inspired me. :) But yeah, your story started out with such a cool premise. It was very original and I haven't read that sort of plot before. So that was nice. It was refreshing and surprising, but after a while, your writing really sort of starts to drag. The story starts to drag and becomes uninteresting. But I like you and your ideas.
Dudeeeeee, just finished reaading this!!! =D UN-FUCKING-REAL!!!! I'M IN LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE~ you're an amazing writer. truely. I wouldn't be surprised if you became an author in later years. seriously. I'm off to read the next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! <333333
DUDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!that was the freaking best story!!!!not exactly ending just the way i wanted it too with a complete and utter backtogetherness between frank and gee but then i read the sequel and i was like "YAY SEQUEL!!" it was totally what i wanted it to be with the kiss and the complete sence that they really were meant to be together!!!seriously!this story points out the complications of a relationship and shows that even chances dangerous as they may be can end up great in the end. :) good job. keep writing!!
I really wasn't expecting the last chapter to be so bluntly honest. It killed me to hear Gerard forgive Frank, but hopefully everything will fit in it's place. I really think Frank's view on fate gave the chapter a lot of originality. It made the characters seem a lot different from eachother. I loved the ending just to sum it up. I'm glad they didn't imediately start dating. I think your writing has improved A LOT since you started. Amazing.
this is one of the first stories i ever read on mibba. i read it before i even had an account, and it's one of the reasons i did get an account. it's the very first story i subscribed to, and i've been with it for a while now. to say the least, it brings tears to my eyes to see it end. i can not express to you how much sentimental value this story holds for me. it is one of the very best i have ever read. thank you for writing it, and i will now go subscribe to the sequel =]
EEEEEKKKK! OMFG!!! It....It....It's OVER!!! -cry- I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE this story with a passion!! and I know I'll love the second one just as much!!! I'm going to go read the description for it now!!!! AWwww and PERFECT ending for this!!! xD
YAY!!! *wipes tear*..'twas a beautiful story muh dear.... I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL!!! IT WAS GOOD I COULDN'T CONTAIN MY EXCITEMENT IN ONLY ONE COMMENT!!!!!!!!!
I adored every single thing abut this story, firstly the plot was so damn original, it's hard to be original with frerards these days, but somehow you managed it. Not only that, you backed up a plot with strong, life like characters who interacted and reacted realistically to situations. You also made the characters love able and made us want certain outcomes, very important, but very hard to do. The events and twists were believable, and they kept us guessing right until the last few chapters, which turned this story into one of my addictions. <3 Mostly, it was very well written and I loved every damn minute of it, so I'm mega excited for the sequel!
This story was easily the most original, well written, interesting, addicting, AmAzing one I've read. And I mean every word of that! I'm sad it's finished.... Dunno what I'd do if you didn't have a sequel coming!
You had such a great set up. Really. I loved the beginning, kept waiting for Gerard to find out, kept waiting for more complications from Lilly. And I got nothin'.
And you know what else? I thought for sure that Gerard's dad would be Frank's dad too. Some kind of illicit-romance spawned Frank and through fate's nasty little mindgames, he and Gerard fell in love. And he hid the fact that they were brothers until they were way deep into it. And Gerard would leave and then they'd get back together, deciding that it just doesn't matter.
Actually, that'd make a great Waycest. You have inspired me. :) But yeah, your story started out with such a cool premise. It was very original and I haven't read that sort of plot before. So that was nice. It was refreshing and surprising, but after a while, your writing really sort of starts to drag. The story starts to drag and becomes uninteresting. But I like you and your ideas.