Born to Die - Comments

Update soon? :) I hope

Hello dear authors. I came here via comment swap. First of all, your story title is captivating. "Born to Die", it seriously made me wonder what your story would be about. As for the summary, judging from the chapters, you guys can do a better work. I'm sure you can make it as interesting as the chapters are. I liked how the first chapter started, the wrong time-wrong place thing. Brownie points for that cause its a philosophy proven true. C: I also liked the titles of your chapters. I don't know what else to say about this gem. I truly loved reading this and I wanna see this story to the end. ~Marian.

Hello dear authors. I came here via comment swap. First of all, your story title is captivating. "Born to Die", it seriously made me wonder what your story would be about. As for the summary, judging from the chapters, you guys can do a better work. I'm sure you can make it as interesting as the chapters are. I liked how the first chapter started, the wrong time-wrong place thing. Brownie points for that cause its a philosophy proven true. C: I also liked the titles of your chapters. I don't know what else to say about this gem. I truly loved reading this and I wanna see this story to the end. ~Marian.

Comment swap.
I congratulate you on your attention to detail. However I have to say I'm rather irked with the constand repetition of words In your vocabulary. Other than that small error I find your story to be impressive and eye catching.

I'm really glad that comment swap gave me a great story to read(: I love Tokio Hotel, my friend got me to start listening to them and then I started reading about them and this is just amazing(: I love reading this story, it's great, keep it up(:

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So, I'm not really interested in crime stories, other than punk/drug related or prostitutes and I'm certainly not a fan of Tokyo Hotel. Having said this, I do enjoy your writing style, and love how detailed your work is. I have to point out though, that you repeat a lot of the same words, and maybe you could use synonyms instead, it will help you embellish your vocabulary as well as keep the reader interested. Still though, great use of detail and description!

Comment swap sent me here and I am totally not complaining! I'm a sucker for organized crime stories (mafia, gangs whatever!) and I really think you've got a good plot and some interesting characters! I did notice some minor punctuation errors, but its not a huge deal I'm sure I have plenty in my work! Keep up the good work!

Your story is amazing,cant wait to read more ^^

Hellooo, I've come here via comment swap.
Well hello. The first chapter was definitely intense and made me want to keep reading more. You definitely have a unique style of writing, and I really like it. You're good with descriptions and building up the character's personalities. I absolutely adore this so far, so I hope you continue with it. You've done a really good job, keep it up!

-Jess xx

I used to really be into Tokio Hotel, but lately I haven't been listening. So, it was kind of funny when comment swap threw this at me, it was kind of refreshing. You are very good at writing, and good at imagery, and the story plot itself is very nice. There are a few grammatical errors, but who am I talk? You have a way with words in this story, and the plot is very attention grabbing. Keep writing. <3

Overall I really enjoy your story. There is a borderline manic characteristic to them Katerina, that I really enjoy reading. You really bring that side out. You are very talented using word to bring a very specific picture to life.

However there are very few grammatical errors I've caught, you can just sometimes not be consistent with tense. Which sometimes isn't very noticeable to your when you are reading it yourself. I totally understand and have a problem with it too, which is why I look for it.

Other than that. You have a real talent and I will definitely be reading more! (:

I'm here from Comment Swap. I honestly am not a Tokio Hotel fan in the slightest. However this story is very well written and very captivating. Your words flow beautifully, and it would make an amazing original fiction. Keep writing!

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I got this story from comment swap, and unfortunately I am not a Tokio Hotel fan either.
I read the first two chapters, and might I say, you are a fantastic reader. Weren't too many errors, in fact, there hardly were any!

You got a good plot, characters are developing at a good rate... interesting(:
Keep it coming, its good.

Intresting story,cant wait to read more of it.

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I'm not a Tokio Hotel fan so I'm just going to judge your writing. I have to say that your title, summary and layout are very intriguing. This is so unique! I've never read a band fan fiction like this. I really applaud you. You are an excellent writer and I saw no mistakes. Great job!

Not a big fan of Tokio Hotel but that wont affect my judgement (Dont Worry!!) I have to say that this chapter is very well written, i cant seem to find much wrong with it which is unusual for me. Usually i try to tell writer how to improve! I got this Comment Swapper... Update soon and keep up the good work! :D