Is This What You Call a Family? - Comments

Hope you're ready for the next instalment

Chapter 5
I have no memory at all of what I inteneded to write here so I'll just curse you out a bunch and tell you I'm glad I'm at least 8 chapters in cause this ending would have had me begging you for another update how you going to do that to all your nice readers?

Chapter 6
I just love this chapter like seriously, the whole dancer thing, and calling her grandpa dude is just epic!

After having five chapters of sadness and just emtotions not all that great I loved this whole chapter and how her and Papa Gates are already interacting Its just nice to see that even with her sadness and being in a dreary hostpital she's found a small pecie of happy

Chapter 7
After your exsplanation and how much Ruth has been in this story I think I'm begining to like her, but I still get the feeling she is one of them bubbly people who love their job, and it makes me smile to see some one so happy even with long hour shifts.

Did I miss something, has Ruth brought her daughter in or is this one of them things where a girl is just being helpful and funny all kind of at the same time? I'm so curious about Ruth now actually she bought underwear for this girl her daughter is sharing cloths with a girl she possibly doesn't know, does Ruth do this for all her patians of just this one?

I think its cute how excited she is for a shower I'm going to guess its the first real one she'd had since being in tthere.Okay so you have me cracking up imagining a nurse mesuring the feet of some one while they sleep.
I'm a wee bit shocked Ruth didn't give her, her home or cell number it seemed like they where possibly going to be close. I like Papa Gates still but I don't like how easily the social guy said she could be put up for adoption, this leads me to believe its a possible him to a possible way of life I don't think I'm going to like..

Chapter 8/b]
I like how we are finding out family things from Papa but I dislike how Brian isn't there, this still bugs me so bad, sure he called the doctor every hour or what ever but if he was really concerned about HIS daughter he would have come home I know you said I'll pick up on my stuff but ugh this issue still really irks me.

You're giving some really good descriptions in this chapter, why are they in () instead of done normally, I know at times some stories can be heavy with their disriptions but you'res are done when they need to be and very nicely writen.

I cant spell the sisters name and I'm lazy so I'm dubbing her the sister I like how she is all oh you don't know yet type deal going on here, I'm hoping the more I read the more I'll see the sister has told the secret I really think that she needs to be told before he gets home to meet her after all, its going to be a shock. And she may not even want to hear his side of the story with how her mom was all he walked out for better things, of course being a rock start is kind of better.

Damn it I wish some one would tell her something! But I liked how well her and the sister are getting along, I also felt this was a great chapter I feel all her time at the hostpital was more of the fillers then this one was if I'm going to be honest with you, as for the whole being able to update I think you should do it sparadically assuming you can still hold up to the once a week maybe two days a week thing I'm not sure it shold really matter when we get the update as long as we get it
Much <3 Kat.

@mindblind

You know me I'm always seeing what I can find in a story glad I did something no one else has, I must have missed the hostpital name sorry bout that. And I only have two chapters left to write about so that may mean the comment could happen in just a few minutes or hours depending on how long it takes me to wake up.

@ Mrs.Katsumi.Grinch
The second chapter probably is a bit too far fetched but I'm writing it down to adrenaline clouding her pain and security not being too smart, aha. For Ruth I kind of just thought of her as one of those naturally bubbly people even running on zero hours of sleep and tries to balance everything as well as she can. She's actually loosely based on a friend of mine that does the same thing. As for Brian, cookies for you! There are small things that I'm going to be hiding throughout Brian's behavior and that is one of them. You're the first one to comment on it and I'm kind of glad it rustled someone's jimmies. As for the hospital, I did mention she was in a specific one (which I made sure wasn't a real one since I didn't want to do research lol). I am very glad you are getting into the story and I can't wait for the next installment of your comments, aha.

Chapter 1
Is holy shit balls batman acceptable for this first chapter like dude wow. That was intense, I feel it was a tad rushed, but at the same time had a really freaking strong effect and I can tell you I am for sure hooked and going right in to chapter to.

Chapter 2
again another intense chapter but I feel its a little far fetched sorry please don't take that as me being rude just with the injuries she probably has and the fact he hollered for security they'd have probably shut down the elevators so that she couldn't get away, and pulling out an IV hurts like hell....
I do how ever love all the emotion I'm feeling with this and the fact that my heart is kind of in my stomach at how it ended I feel so bad her mom is gone

Chapter 3
I like how fast cps seemed to act in this one and that their going to try and find her family. But is 16 hours really enough to call it a coma?

I like ruth, but at the same time she seems to bubbly like seriously most nurses have more then one patiant and work 16 hour shifts at times so Ruth gives me the impression she is one of them people who are new and still love their job.

Chapter 4

Wow I'm glad they found the father and a bit shocked that the social worker is giving this kind of need to be in person information away, but I guess being in sydny is a good enough exscuse to decided to do it over the phone.

I dislike Brian alread he's just found out his daughter is lucky to be alive and he hasn't seen her in twelve years and he still is thinking about the fans he doesn't hardly see I dislike that so very much his daughter should have been his first thought!

I'm having a little dificulty with the line about trying to blow up the hostpital phone when the case worker never gave him any information like that or even what hostpital she was in and I'm sure there is more then one in L.A
Okay I know I've only gave you my thoughts on four chapters but I'm so very very very sleepy so when I wake back up I'll comment with the other four.

I really am already in love with this story Much <3 Kat

p.s Mind just realized this is one of yours how do I randomly keep reading stuff of yours with out knowing it?

@ mindblind
I understand 100%.. Honestly I need a job but I'm trying to take as many classes per semester as possible so I can graduate by the end of this year or next spring, that way I can apply for better paying jobs. I need a car but until then my friend is letting me use hers to get back and forth. If it gets too much worse without a job, though, I'll def have to find something. I'm just sick of retail. Everyone tells me other chains aren't as bad but Walmart has screwed me over so much I'm afraid to try other places lol. My managers are begging me to come back though. I was always told if you quit then you'd automatically not be able to come back but all my paperwork still says I'm rehirable. And it'd be awesome lol. I was adopted so if I were put in her place and I found out Syn Gates was my father, I'd be that way. Like, am I dreaming? haha.

@ K.Shadows
Ugh, so you understand my pain. It's so frustrating because I don't really have the option to quit again since I don't have a car yet and there's nowhere in walking distance that is hiring right now. But I'm crossing my fingers that once we get our new manager I might be getting another position on the morning shift which would be a lot less stressful. As for the story, I haven't really decided if she will have listened to them or not. I may have like before when they've played and she liked them but never looked into them, but I dunno. If I do it that way, she may just be really surprised at the fact he's a musician.

@ shortygirl
Oh believe me, I wish I could just lose my job. I'm just lucky to be working in the back of the store so I don't deal with customers a lot anymore or I would lose my job.

I recently quit from Wal-Mart for that exact reason. I had set hours and set days off because I go to school and take care of my baby sister, and they pretty much told me even though I had been there for two years and the other guy in my department had only been there for a month, they had to change my availability to work with his. So I smiled and said, "Well I quit then." I'm a broke bitch but I'm a happy bitch! Lol. Still loving this story, and I like the fillers in this one, gives it a homey touch, i feel like I can relate to the character. I hope she does listen to a7x so when Brian walks through the door, she's like, "You've got to be shitting me. Am I being punk'd?" haha. More soon! whenever you get the chance. I love it.

I'm really glad to find this story again. I knew I had started reading it quite a while ago. So happy you're updating!!! Please keep it up if you can. I can't wait until she meets Brian. I wonder if she listens to A7X????

@ mindblind
Ugh.. retail I can't do that shit without loosing a job. I work at pet smart grooming salon.

@ shortygirl
Ugh, at Wal-Mart. I should be used to their shit by now but I'm not. I worked there for eleven months, left for six, and came back for the past three. But it's still frustrating.

I love how she calls him papa. I can't wait til she meets her dad. And I'm having problems at work too. Where do you work if you don't mind me asking?

I really like this so far.

Glad to hear Michelle isn't going to be evil in this one! It seems like all the stories I read about them, Michelle is just nasty lol. I'm loving these updates!

@ EmilieAlyosha
Michelle is definitely a yay for this. And to distinguish the question so no one has to ask, I also do not plan on making Michelle evil or something, haha.

Getting closer. I'm itching for Brian and Juliet to meet. So Michelle? Yay or nay in this story?

Thank you for the updates

This new version is so much better
And I can not wait the chapter when Juliet meets her Dad

and of course the rest of the band :)

This was a sweet update! I've never read a story like this and I have to say I'm extremely pleased with this one!

This is a curious story and the plot has me intrigued. Can't wait to see more as it develops. Thanks for the update

I'M SO EXCITED

I love this. Please update soon!