Homepage › Stories › Live To Rise › Comments

Live To Rise - Comments

  • Levitate6661

    Levitate6661 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    @ Ashlyn in Wonderland
    thanks i'll keep it in mind
    August 30th, 2012 at 06:33pm
  • Umburrr

    Umburrr (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    34
    Location:
    United States
    Alright, I apologize if this sounds mean but I'm going to give you some pointers on how to make your writing better. First off, for each new person speaking, they get their own paragraph, but don't go too crazy with this concept. Names should always be capitalized, and your pace is very fast. It makes for what most readers perceive to be an unrealistic story line, and makes it harder to follow. Slow down, you have all the time in the world, and no limit on your words.
    August 30th, 2012 at 05:40pm
  • No Name?

    No Name? (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    me and Levitate6661 says thanks Mr. Green Mr. Green
    August 27th, 2012 at 02:19am
  • QueenofBatCountry

    QueenofBatCountry (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    I like this like ALOT! its a unique story line and its awesome!
    August 26th, 2012 at 07:55pm
Homepage › Stories › Live To Rise › Comments