August 10th, 2013 at 03:32am
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This is a beautiful story. Looking at the layout and the title, I thought for sure it would be a regular, medieval based romance, but the summary pulled me forward, almost as if putting me in a trance and making me want to read. The first chapter was indeed long but oh-so fantastic! I haven't quite read anything much like that. Wonderful job.
This is something I have never seen before. It's a bit of a mix of Eragon and the average fairytale. Which I really like. I also find it quite interesting how worn down shoes are the key to their hand in marriage. I never read that before.
The beginning was a huge word dump though, meaning all the information was right there, why the shoes were worn down, who the sisters were and even the man of the story. I think if the shoes being worn down was kept a mystery it would be more alluring. It would also keep the readers guessing.
It was still a really good story though. Very unique which catches my eye. I think it's really good. So great work on this one.