Raised by Wolves - Comments

Hi!!! Comment swap brought me here. When I saw the title, I really expected it to be a fan-fiction off of this band that I'm absolutely in love with. But, I ended up loving it anyway. I really the different things that you did with the personalities. A lot of people on this site don’t really get how to make subtle differences like making one person really defensive/protective whereas others couldn’t care less.

I enjoyed reading this, your title is really alluring, and I like your characater's personalities! Although it did seem a bit rushed, I can see that you have a lot of potential! :-) Great work, hope to read more of your stuff soon!

Edit: Whoops, sorry, didn't realize I posted that twice!!

I enjoyed reading this, your title is really alluring, and I like your characater's personalities! Although it did seem a bit rushed, I can see that you have a lot of potential! :-) Great work, hope to read more of your stuff soon!

@AliSaysRoar thank you. XD I may start up this story again considering how much I enjoyed writing it. I Just need a functional computer. lol. Right now I'm using my mom's since mine is not working.

I really like how you conveyed Sam's distressed nature when she's in the hospital and has no idea what's going on. I don't like how bitchy her mom is being though >:[ I like how Ryan is defensive of her against her mom, though. Overall I enjoyed it!!

this is based on chapter one of your story. a moonlight picnic is a classic place for both a romance and a horor story to begin so there is a lot of natural irony. My main note would be to do some editing or have someone proofread, especially add alot of commas that are needed, for examplethe third sentence is "He looked like a model the way he was sitting on the picnic blanket, looking over at his date." it should be...
He looked like a model, the way he was sitting on the picnic blanket, looking over at his date.

Comment Swap brought me here and I'm not really sure what it is really about. I don't understand who the person the fanfic is supposed to about. I guess I'm just a little confused, but I did enjoy it. Your writing is good and although a little bit rushed it was still a pleasure to read.

I think you repeated Ch 11 and Ch 12. They're the same chapters

I felt it to be a little rushed, but your writing is no bad at all. The idea is very original, but the way you had Sam confess to being raised by werewolves was a bit, well, out-there. There wasn't very much build-up and it left me wanting more out of that scene.

Other than that, the concept is lovely. Keep writing!

It sounds interesting so far, but I'm not sure if I can get into it, I like how it starts off on a date and then moves into her life right away, but then again I'm usually more into like cursed towns or zombies, I'll read more to see what I think, its good, but its just what I usually read.

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I've never actually read a werewolf story before or a FIR fanfic at all. I was actually expecting this to be a Ronnie story but to find out that it was a Ryan one instead kind of made me happy c: I like how Sam's telling Jethro all about it like it's a blast from the past. The Vocab for this story is really good and I like the plot.

I'm on my phone so I don't know what the layout is like but I really like this story. Continue where you're going! C:

Normally, I wouldn't look at this story and decide to read it. This is the glory of the comment swap. I read it and actually quite enjoyed it. The only criticism I can give is that your sentences can be a bit choppy at times and sound a bit unnatural. Don't be afraid to lengthen them.

I come to you via comment swap!!! That being said, this story isn't exactly my cup of tea; I don't usually read this kind of story. That being said, I do think this was very well written and creative. It was also very descriptive, which I liked. Great job and keep up the good work!!

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not really the kind of theme that I read but it's well written, nevertheless. Of course, I read the story cause its a give and take and I have to admit, there's a few interesting parts ;D

I'd suggest to add more descriptive lines for imaginative aid but otherwise, your writing style is great (:

I met Ryan this past summer

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Hmmm, I honestly thought this was gonna be about Teen wolf I'm sorry. The whole idea of being raised by werewolves is actually pretty rad. I like the idea. I love werewolves. Not because of Teen wolf. I mean i've watched the show, liked it at some point but still. The idea of werewolves bring me back to that. Maybe to be safe you should put up a warning that it isn't teen wolf.

Comment swap led me to this story......... And, I must say, it was NOT something of my interest. I have never really heard of this person before, so it confused me. But, I figured, this is what comment swap is all about. New things, right? Well, this didn't really interest me after I finished, either, so....yeah. But, it was well written, so props to that.

When I first clicked this story, I thought it was going to be a FIR fan fic about Ronnie. xD But oh my! A girl raised by werewolves, quite crazy huh? But, your story is very well written. Though, the layout doesn't seem to match up with it, I won't pester you about it. Your vocabulary is large and that's always a good thing!
Really lovely plot and characters, I hope you continue this story, keep up the amazing work! <3

I don't really know who this band is at all just like Katlight but I can admit this story is pretty good. I hesitated to read it at first but I'm surprised it actually pulled me into the story. Your vocabulary of this story is very good and immediately had me into the story.

I'm looking forward to reading more of this. It has a nice plot to it with well descriptive scenes. I can literally picture everything in my head. Keep up the good work! :)

I don't really know who this band is at all just like Katlight but I can admit this story is pretty good. I hesitated to read it at first but I'm surprised it actually pulled me into the story. Your vocabulary of this story is very good and immediately had me into the story.

I'm looking forward to reading more of this. It has a nice plot to it with well descriptive scenes. I can literally picture everything in my head. Keep up the good work! :)