I'll See You In My Dreams - Comments

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There are a few grammar/spelling errors, it may be useful to go through and find them. I won't list them here, but reading the story aloud to yourself is very helpful.

I do like the amount of backstory you put in, without it being overwhelming. It did feel like Tom and Alex were close, while Tom and his father were a bit strained. I think that this story was excellently written, and it is a nice addition to your writing portfolio.

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Personally, I loved it. I'm not th emotional type BUT it did soften my heart a bit. I am not a huge fan of ATL but I still got the gist of it. It was beautifully written and I felt what he felt but one thing I would like to know is why did he feel sorry? Was it because he died? Or was it something more.
(FYI the whole thing where his hand drifted over the casket was very moving!)

This is very realistic. I love the description in this story, it is very great when associated with a funeral. I actually started to cry as I read this (I especially cried at the end) I also love how you made this so personal, which is what every great writer does. beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!

This is very realistic. I love the description in this story, it is very great when associated with a funeral. I actually started to cry as I read this (I especially cried at the end) I also love how you made this so personal, which is what every great writer does. beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!

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This was very well written and realistic. I really enjoyed it because of how realistic it was. I absolutely love how descriptive you were, excpecially when he is saying goodbye along with how hesitant he almost was going to the casket. And the end of it left me questioning what happened? Why is he sorry? If you ever decided to do a short prequel that would be awesome. I know I would read it!

The layout is totally totally appealing! Do you make them for other people? I'd love to have ones like this! Second of all, your writing is AMAZING. If you ever wanted to co-write a ATL fan-fiction or an original I'd totally be into it. From this single chapter I can tell how much potential you have and I'd love to start a story with you! :D

The layout is totally totally appealing! Do you make them for other people? I'd love to have ones like this! Second of all, your writing is AMAZING. If you ever wanted to co-write a ATL fan-fiction or an original I'd totally be into it. From this single chapter I can tell how much potential you have and I'd love to start a story with you! :D

Here from comment swap. First off, I really like the layout and your title made me want to read this immediately. I felt like crying when I started reading, the emotions you've portrayed are very well done. You should definitely be proud of yourself for writing this, it's amazing!

Oh my goodness I almost cried reading and then told my dad I loved him. This really evoked so much emotion in the reader. Such a great one shot! Your writing style really lets the reader into Alex's head which is awesome. Great writing but this one shot was crazy depressing and tragic, although definetely worth reading.

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So, before I get into all the constructive criticism and why I enjoyed it, I must say that this made me cry a little. So automatic props for dragging some serious emotions out of me.
Your writing style is amazing, and it felt like I was there with Alex, feeling what he was feeling. Your descriptions are really well written also, and every word was there for a reason, to support the surrounding setences. I find that some writers can become overly desctiptive and it just gets down-right flowery feeling. I didn't spot any grammar/spelling mistakes, so nice job.
Oh, and I'm a HUGE fan of All Time Low, so I loved it just for that, too. I hope you get into the school you want and good luck!

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I really like this. I think almost everyone can relate to this. Well, feeling like this anyways. I love the detail you put into it, and I didn't see any mistakes. Which is very uncommon for a piece like this. Anyways, the writing itself is absolutely phenomenal. (:

You made the characters seem really real in such a short piece. It was well done. I liked how well you described Alex's acent to the coffin was, because you could just really feel it, along with him sighting his brother. I really commend you on that. Overall, this piece was really well written and you have so nice word choice. The only grammar problem I noticed was this sentence: Alex however, sat crestfallen in the back of the room, in the very last row of seats as opposed to the seat beside his father up in the front; Up in the front and next to the open casket. Up should be lowercase. c:

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For such a short story, you did a wonderful job of developing a background and life to Alex. You were very descriptive when you were talking about him walking to the casket and looking at his brother's body.
I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes either so kudos and I hope this helps out your portfolio.

Hey, comment swapper here- first off thisisnt the kind of story I read as I can see its a band-fic although I am interested as to wether the character of Tom is real or fictional?

However, I thought this was very sweet and well written, giving a really nice little bit of background into the protagonist and a connection between the two characters :)

Hey, comment swapper here- first off thisisnt the kind of story I read as I can see its a band-fic although I am interested as to wether the character of Tom is real or fictional?

However, I thought this was very sweet and well written, giving a really nice little bit of background into the protagonist and a connection between the two characters :)

Oh, I'm so sorry I posted my comment so much! My computer glitched and I don't know how to delete them. I'm sorry!

I'm here form comment swap. :) First off, nice layout, it suits the black and white picture. To be honest I'm not sure if this is a band fic or not, since I'm not familiar with Tom, but the story is good. The grammar and spelling is great too. Overall, great job!

I'm here form comment swap. :) First off, nice layout, it suits the black and white picture. To be honest I'm not sure if this is a band fic or not, since I'm not familiar with Tom, but the story is good. The grammar and spelling is great too. Overall, great job!

I'm here form comment swap. :) First off, nice layout, it suits the black and white picture. To be honest I'm not sure if this is a band fic or not, since I'm not familiar with Tom, but the story is good. The grammar and spelling is great too. Overall, great job!

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First story I read on here and it's touching and yet so well writing. I love the way your writing flows with the story catching the details very well. Every comment on her basically took the words from my mouth; but keep up the great work I subscribed and update soon(: