August 14th, 2012 at 01:06pm
So sad! :c I can see this turning out to be a great piece though with a great story line and interesting too. I would maybe lighten the background behind the words a little, but that is just me.
Everyone has already said everything that can come to my mind such as how it is detailed and it makes you apart of the character's life.
I really enjoy this story and can't wait to read more of it! Also, hopefully you get a good grade on this paper for school.
Subscribed, and update soon!
First story I read on here and it's touching and yet so well writing. I love the way your writing flows with the story catching the details very well. Every comment on her basically took the words from my mouth; but keep up the great work I subscribed and update soon(: