I really love the way you've described the silence. It's haunting. I really like the style of writing you have used, I'm not sure who it reminds me of. Nobody I can think. It's a good style though Smile.
I also like the way that you have to read on for a bit to find out what has happened. You don't find out straight away. Suspense there. I like suspense.
Joe is also really happy, and not sad because he can't walk. I like this because usually you have this person really sad and depressed. This line sums him up for me. You just have to let go. It's not like I'm dead. That's really awesome. It kind of sums up Joe for me. Always looking for a silver lining.
All in all, good chapter. Also, I can't see any mistakes.
April 26th, 2008 at 01:18pm
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I like this Glitter. It's a good chapter.
I really love the way you've described the silence. It's haunting. I really like the style of writing you have used, I'm not sure who it reminds me of. Nobody I can think. It's a good style though Smile.
I also like the way that you have to read on for a bit to find out what has happened. You don't find out straight away. Suspense there. I like suspense.
Joe is also really happy, and not sad because he can't walk. I like this because usually you have this person really sad and depressed. This line sums him up for me.
You just have to let go. It's not like I'm dead.
That's really awesome. It kind of sums up Joe for me. Always looking for a silver lining.
All in all, good chapter. Also, I can't see any mistakes.