Good Girls Never Get Caught - Comments

Wow. I can't wait to read this. Ir's a great start, Errbear.

Joshie-Kins <3

This is a great start! I'm sorry you couldn't finish by the deadline, but if you told me, I would have given you a extension. I really do like this so far. So far, this sy hapotential to make second place, first maybe when it as finished. I'd love to read more, contest or not.

Interesting story. Now I have that song from Annie stuck in my head, haha

Comment swap did not bring me here. I saw this on that little updates thingy with what your friends do. Newsfeed, I guess. Anyways, the title is what caught me.

You worried about the layout. It's simple, easy to read, and doesn't have all the irrelevant stuff. However, it's a little plain. The title and subtitle just sort of...sit there. While it doesn't take a lot from the quality of things, I think it'd be more appealing to readers to have some sort of something to break the monotony of the layout. Either way, I'm still subbing and recc-ing this story.

As far as the story, I have to say, damn you have some talent! I can't wait to know Alexa and Susie more. I favor Susie at the moment, but that's probably because I'm from the south so I really dig stories involving it or people from it.

In the author's note on chapter two, you asked a couple of questions. I honestly think that prostitute (or is Alexa just going to sleep around a lot, or is there some kind of rising-in-status thing, because I'd still consider that a prostitute lol) is worse than stripper, but cases can be made for both. Is there anything wrong with it? I'd like to say no and I'd also like to say that it's not something somewhat "decent" would do, but the truth is, if you have something people would pay money for, and that's the best way you know to make a living, there's nothing wrong with it (whether or not it's forced onto someone is a totally different story).

Since it's dealing with the sex industry, if sex-for-money is going to be involved, I've heard that some call girls/prostitutes refuse to let their clients kiss them because of the intimacy (like, they see it as something to be shared with an actual companion, not a client). Whether or not that's what you're looking for, I hope it helped.

Anyways, I can't wait for your next update :)

I must have not written enough so let me add on. I love how irs written journal/memoir style because its not just written in first person to be in first person. It works well. I love your writing style overall and just this general idea, its not about the loner girl whose out casted for being a geeky nerd. I so cant wait to read more.

I loved the summary it really drew me in and as for the story the prelude/prologue/first chapter was amazing. Your detail is amazing. Im gonna subscribe and recc this. I cant wait to see how it goes

Firstly, I love your summary and the extended metaphor in your story. The relationship that you created between the fairytale and the "what happens when you grow out of that is lovely."

Secondly, Alexa has a very strong voice. She's a very see if I care kind of person and I love it. Congratulations on a successful story. :)

Hello :) Well, let''s get started. You did a good job with the summary but you have to fix the layout cause the words in chapter one, don't show up. It was just a black page with the banner so I changed it to custom layout to read it. What you wrote on the banner and the title itself, pulled me in to read it and the first chapter was a success. And yeah I did read everything, even the author's note and I will subscribe and rec your story cause it has potential and I'm sure it will be amazing. Keep up the great work and share your beautiful imagination with me and your fans. :)

ERRIN good job and glad to help