So, after reading this I can definitely tell you've progressed as a writer. That's not to say that this isn't a good story, because it 100% is. I loved how you started it with her parents, and how you've got everything repeating like it does. I did catch a few spelling mistakes, but again, whenever I read your stuff I'm just enjoying it all so I don't take the time to mark it down. I'm going recommend (of course) and subscribe (almost sadly.) I hope you give this story some attention soon, because I truly do wish to see more of Viola's story and actually meet this Jasper.
July 29th, 2015 at 12:03am