What's So Good About Picking Up The Pieces? - Comments

  • Pidgin

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    Drei - The balance of dialogue and description is working for me. I think the bit at the beginning where Nicki describes how she finds the boys -collectively and individually- is really good. The moment between Alex and Nicki is superb, I like that she is opening up the teeny tiniest of bits. I also adore how Jack trips on the drum kit.
    January 27th, 2013 at 03:13pm
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    On to Chapter two; Alex's introduction line is perfect!!!!
    I like that Nicki stays with the personality described in the first chapter: Relatively quiet. I like that everything the ATL boys are saying/doing, I can actually imagine them doing.
    January 27th, 2013 at 03:08pm
  • Pidgin

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    I approve of your first chapter :)
    I like the almost... simplicity of this chapter. I notice most stories start off which full on plots, etc. The way that information about Nicki is fed through the writing is awesome!
    January 27th, 2013 at 03:05pm
  • s0wrongitsrosie

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    thank you for updating, love this!
    January 18th, 2013 at 08:01am
  • Janelle29

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    oh shit damn good!!~
    January 18th, 2013 at 04:52am
  • krazy4gaskarth

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    that was realy good. cant wait for another chapter :D
    January 18th, 2013 at 03:35am
  • thejagrafess

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    update again soon bc this story is one of the best okay
    January 17th, 2013 at 09:39pm
  • emmajanebruggy

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    I fucking love this! omg so many feels
    January 17th, 2013 at 02:44pm
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    @ love me always
    haha thank you :)
    And I actually haven't gone to Warped Tour, going there is my fricking dream, but I don't live in the States, I'm Asian :D so you my friend, are the lucky duck :D
    There's actually an indoor festival coming up with those bands in March :D
    The tickets were my birthday present since the show's 3 days before it haha :P
    Thank you so much for supporting my story! Love you <3 *does hand heart sign thing*
    January 17th, 2013 at 01:03pm
  • love me always

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    oh my god amazing story :) and OH MY GOD YOU LUCKY SON OF A BITCH i'm jealous of you i got to see of mice&men at warped tour and also all time low at warped too but i never got to meet them ;~; you lucky duck
    January 17th, 2013 at 12:53pm
  • biancav

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    @ krazy4gaskarth
    Haha thanks :D I'm really glad you like this :D haha :) And there's no need to be jealous, you just have to practice writing a lot! Trust me, in 6th grade, my writing was pretty bad (at least in my opinion) but my English teacher at the time helped me to improve a lot (mostly because I paid attention in class, now I've fallen asleep in English at least 3 times lol) Anyways, thank you SO MUCH for supporting the story! I'me really happy you liked it even if it's a filler :) New chapter probably next week since my family will be on holiday haha. Merry Christmas! :D <3 <3
    December 25th, 2012 at 11:26am
  • krazy4gaskarth

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    omg ok wait ur in 7th grade? uh im jell i wish i could be as good a writer as u! and honestly in 7th grade you should aim for high grades but don't freak out over them. anyway this chapter is cute. i actually really liked it for a filler. <333 new chapter soon pleaseeeeee!
    December 25th, 2012 at 08:40am
  • Janelle29

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    biancaaaa... moreee hahah :D
    December 22nd, 2012 at 10:38am
  • lovesickmel0dyy

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    i love that you mentioned something from dan and phil omg that's great. anyway, love that you're updating again! i missed this story, can't wait to see where it goes :)
    December 21st, 2012 at 02:32am
  • kattz

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    Laughed so hard when I recognized the Dan and Phil things:) The first thing i thought when i read Delia smith was actually Dan and phil..
    I quite liked this filler actually. I really liked the Alex and cooking thing. they are learning a bit more about each other, which is good:) keep writing!!
    December 20th, 2012 at 11:21pm
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    @ krazy4gaskarth
    hahah thanks :)
    Glad to know they were missed by someone other than me :D
    December 20th, 2012 at 08:15am
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    @ MaydayParade01
    No problem :) You're kind of the reason I started writing again anyway haha :P
    December 20th, 2012 at 08:14am
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    @ havefaitinme
    Thank you so much! I plan on writing and updating tomorrow :)
    December 20th, 2012 at 08:14am
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    @ AlisonTimeLow
    I fangirled at your comment :D
    December 20th, 2012 at 08:13am
  • AlisonTimeLow

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    I fangirled at the pancakes
    December 20th, 2012 at 07:48am