Hi! I think that your stories structure was very good! It's been a long time since I have read harry potter (Almost 4 or 5 years) so I can't really comment on the content of your story, but I will say that I lobe how descriptive you are! The first chapter, where you explained hermoine's distaste for Ron, and how she thinks of him as 'dumb' kid, really helped set up the rest of the story for me! Honestly reading this story made me remember the story a little bit more! My favorite part is when you started bringing up Hermoine's feelings for Ron, because you did it very subletly and I think it set up all of the future chapters. Anyways great book so far!
March 29th, 2016 at 05:53am