Never According to the Plan - Comments

HOLYHERMIONE.
First off, wow it's been so long since I've read a Harry Potter fanfic. Let me just say, I love the idea of the story being in Hermione's point of view. She's always been my favorite character, so it's great to see thing from her perspective. Secondly, I think you're doing a really great job with the characters. You're staying true to J.K. Rowling's beloved trio while also putting a little spin on things. I definitely think you should continue. This is great so far. Keep up the good work!

-Jess xx

Comment swap sent me here.

I was really interested when I saw that this was all in Hermione's point of view. I always thought it would be interesting to see the story through someone else's eyes, so well done on writing such a good idea! I'd kind of like to see a custom layout on this though, the default layout makes the story seem so...plain.

Like everyone else, I feel the first few chapters move quite slowly. Your description is lacking in places, but when it's there, it's good. Don't short-change yourself on something you're doing well, add in some more description! The spacing out of lines (a small thing, but something that really bugs me) is a bit erratic; sometimes you do it, sometimes you don't. There are few, if any grammar or spelling errors that I spotted on my read-through, so well done on that respect.

You've got a really fabulous idea, just try and describe sights, smells and feelings more in your writing, and you'll have an amazing write. Good luck! :)

Hey! You changed the title! It sounds great and fits in well with the story! :D Please tell me you're gonna update soon? ;)

Comment swap brought me here. The first couple chapters were a little slow, which definitely might turn someone away from this story. However this last chapter was totally awesome! I love the twist in things right at the end of the chapter! It was super exciting!

I definitely hope you continue!

I was pretty wary of this when I first read the description because in all honesty, I've never been that big of a fan of Hermione. I mean she's amazing and everything, but I was always drawn to other characters. Anyway, I read the first chapter and I didn't see anything wrong spelling or grammar wise.

I have to be honest I wasn't very interetsed in reading a story like this when I read it was just a POV kind of story, that it wasn't a straight forward fanfiction. But I read a little and the only thing i can really comment on is your writing skills, spelling, and basic things because, the idea isn't yours, the characters aren't yours. Your take on this is actually pretty fricken awesome and I could kick my self for being so reluctant to read it. Couldn't see any spelling mistakes, no gramatical stuff that needs to be adressed. Good job =)

I wish there were more explanations in the first chapter like why she's so nervous !! As well as why it seems that her, harry potter, and Ron don't seem to know each other only that they shared seats in the train on the way there. To my understanding from the movie at least it seemed like they knew each other more than that. Whatever the case you can really grasp her agony, her fear, and I swear while reading it I got that same sick feeling in the pit of my stomach going through the emotions you described. You're writing is really descriptive and I love it. I wouldn't think this story was about harry potter from her perspective cus its different than others I've read and honestly I didn't expect to like your story but I was so into it I didn't really pay attention to weather there were any spelling or grammar errors, because it was just that good. I definitely recommended your story for others to give it a shot and read it. I hope you continue to write it and update very soon, I'll be waiting patientlyl. This chapter leaves you on edge wanting to know more without understanding why, its good really good!! If you could explain more in the next chapter it will be greatly appreciated, I'm glad comment swap brought me here otherwise I wouldn't have read such a great story. You have a talent, the things you can do with your words are amazing.

Hold on, were they in the Gryffindor common room? If they were (I can't remember) how come Draco was there?

This is a great chapter, I'd forgotten this was Dramione so I was very shocked it was him xD It's not overly out of character to be honest, I could imagine her doing it :) One thing you spelt practice wrong a few times, but other thanthat I loved it! I can't wait to read the rest! Update soon!

I love the way you've written this. It's so very "Hermione-ish". Fantastic work. I'm glad the comment swap brought me here. I really like your take on Ms Rowling's epic work. The battle in Hermione's head about Ron is cute. I don't really know what else to say, other than this is FANTASTIC! (as the Ninth Doctor would say.) No spelling or grammar errors. Lovely. I'm reccing and subscribing.

Oh, just a suggestion. If you go onto the 'home' page, go onto stories, scroll down unil you see a link that says 'comment swap', you should really use that to get more feedback on your story. Basically Mibba gives you a story to read and comment on, and once you have someone will give you a comment in return. :)

As you already know, I love this story and can't wait for the rest! I loved the perspective we saw from Hermione when she was being sorted, especially that little smirk she send Ron, that was cute! I loved how you changed to the fifth year then, it's not something you'd expect, but it doesn't throw you off from the story. I'm interested to read the rest from her POV, like when they take Umbridge into the forest, or when they meet Hagrid's half brother ;)