The Man and The Monster - Comments

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I love the descriptions and I love that it's similar to The Hunchback of Notre Dame. It's unique, has amazing dialogue that really influences the emotions that the readers feel. Please write more! :)

Hello! Well, first, I want to talk about what grabbed my attention. Your title really made me wonder what your story was about. I also really like how you used French numbering for your chapters since it takes place in France. You write beautifully and I love you descriptions. It's easy to read but it sounds so pretty in my head. I also love the idea of the monster man in the bell tower! It reminds me of the hunchback of notre dams which is super interesting!!!

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I have to admit, this is the first fan fiction I have read that is based on a Disney story. I was a little lost in the beginning because I haven't watched the Hunchback of Notre Dame in about sixteen years... but Once I found my way I really enjoyed it. I also like your writing style and the way you have developed the characters. I am looking forward to seeing more.

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This story is really unique, and I loved how you based it off of a Disney story. That itself made me want to read it to see how you interpreted it, never mind the alluring title. Great work, and I liked your use of dialog, too!

I was brought here from comment swap. I liked this for many reasons. It was unique, interesting and I love that it was based on a Disney classic. The title itself is a great way to hook someone into the story. It makes you think and wonder what the story will be like. My final conclusion, I hope to read more of your work. You have a lot of potential.

I have to say that I really enjoyed reading this story so far. It's original. I never heard of a story about Clopin ever and that's a pity. Anyway I like the whole idea and I really like Genevieve. Her personality is powerful and I love that. I found some little lines that I may use in the future when someone annoys me lol

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This is extremely original, I haven't seen anything like it on here. The writing is REALLY good, and from what I read your grammar is good as well. I like the way you describe things, it's really good!
Keep on writing!~

Genevieve how could you say that you are Esmeralda? Have you no idea of the seriousness of the issue at hand? I didn't think so! Now, look where you are, you can't possibly escape on your own!

I'm intrigued to know where it was Esmeralda went off to, although I think that I have an inkling...I just hope that Clopin will stick to his word and get Genevieve back safe and sound, away from Frollo and his evil men!

You have no idea how much I have missed this fac and your writing; so, so, so, so, so, SO much is the answer and even then it doesn't convey the whole of it! I love this fic so much and I can not wait until you update it again!

Absolutely amazing job, m'dear <3 xx

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This is a very interesting take on a Disney classic and I think you've latched onto something good here. I've only read through the first chapter because this is not my personal cup of tea, but I can see it evolving into a great story. However, long chapters make it hard to engage the reader sometimes, otherwise, happy writing!

I think I might be the only person in the entire world that hasn’t watched or whatever of The Hunchback of Notre Dame but this story has made me fall in love, you’ve wrote this perfectly and I love it so much! You’re a brilliant writer and this is just wow! Keep it up :)

Omg, I know that I've told you this before, but I'll tell you again - this story is absolutely incredible!

I really can't wait to see what happens next!

You write Disney films so well young one!
I am so jealous of your writing skills, give them to me, please!

I hope that you update this again soon because I REALLY miss your writing!

Firstly, I'd like to say I'm really sorry. It's not the type of story I normally read and so I couldn't really get into it. Don't get me wrong, I did try my best. However, I do feel that it is extremely well written and set out. I can tell the story will go far. Keep it up and good luck :)

I never watched The Hunchback of Notre Dame, but I've heard of it, however I had very little to go on, but I tried to keep an open mind with this story, and wow!
However, in the first chapter, first line, is Goat supposed to be capitalized? Also in the first chapter, I don't think colors have to be capitalized, either. I wasn't really sure about that.
You used a lot of description in this, and apart from the Goat thing(which I'm not sure on) it's a very very interesting story. Your chapters are very long and give plenty of information to what's happening in the story. This makes me want to watch the movie now.

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The premise for the story is great. The Hunchback of Notre Dame was a great move.
I like reading this, you have a really cool writing style that kept me interested.
I like it a lot, I wish you well with this story.

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Okay, so first thought was that I love your layout. I know it's not important to the story, but it looks great :)

Secondly, a confession: I have never read or watched The Hunchback of Notre Dame so I started reading this not really knowing what to expect. Admittedly, that may have put me off the story a little, as it is quite difficult to read fanfiction when you have no background knowledge, I'm afraid. For this reason, I did only read the first chapter of your fic.

Despite this, however, I did enjoy reading your story and your writing style is fantastic. The whole thing sounds great, and flows really well. There are no spelling/grammatical errors that I could pick out, aside from the few little things that have been mentioned in previous comments.

Although I did not particularly care for your plot (entirely my fault for not having seen/read the original story, not a problem with your writing), I enjoyed you writing, it was lovely to read.

Keep it up, and good luck with the rest of the story :)

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Well, I must say, I haven't watched the Hunchback of Notre Dame is SUCH a long time. I don't think I've ever seen a fanfiction written about it, so I'm pretty excited to start reading, to be honest! Your layout is lovely as well, I really do like it.

And onto the story. I love the idea, and the concept, and you do a really good job of bringing across your ideas to the reader, both in your description and your general way of writing! However, I did notice a few things that irked me slightly as I was reading. Only a few, though.

"As my cousin and I, along with her Goat, Djali, made our way slowly through the narrow cobbled streets into the town square" doesn't really make much sense. The 'as' at the beginning seems out of place, it reads as if there should be something added on at the end of the sentence. As has been mentioned, if you're adding "he said", "she said" and the likes onto the end of a sentence, you should use a comma as your punctuation and not a period. You can be a bit comma-happy in places, so I'd just watch that as well.

"from the mundane to the monumental" - I love this line. It's such a small thign, but the alliteration combined with the stark opposites just reads so well!

You really do have a fabulous story in the works here, and I wish you luck in your writing. Keep up the great work! :)

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I haven't seen the Hunchback of Notre Dame in a very long time first of all! And I have to say this is a pretty creative story and just plain Cute!! Your story is very well edited grammar and spelling wise so good job, and keep that up! There were times when you didn’t use dialog right, and make sure you only use periods when your ending a sentence and not when you’re going to add something like ‘I said'. Anyways I haven’t seen this movie in forever like I said above so I don’t remember a whole lot from it, but this story brings back my childhood. I have to say I’ve never read a fanfic like this, but I’m impressed on how interesting it was. Your writing style and skill impresses me and I got to tell you when I saw the title page of this, I didn’t think I would like it, but I was truly impressed. I guess that’s why the say don’t judge a book by its cover ;D oh and I absolutely love your layout!!! Did you make it? The way you use detail is amazing, I feel like I can almost see what your describing so keep up the good work and update soon!!!

I haven't seen the Hunchback of Notre Dame in a very long time. The layout of this story is adorable. I really liked this. There weren't any mistakes that I could pick up on, so well done. Keep up the good work. <3

This story is so cute. I cannot believe I'm reading a fanfiction about the Hunchback of Notre Dame! I have to agree with the comment below, however, about focusing on your grammatical errors, because your concept is impeccable. You know what you want to say in your writing, and it definitely comes across to readers.

Good job! Keep it up!

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So, let me just say that the picture at the top is amazing :3

I haven't actually read/seen the Hunchback of Notre Dame, so a lot of this didn't make sense to me. So I'll just focus on the grammar stuff instead. There are hardly any grammar/spelling mistakes. The only thing I would say is you need to fix your dialogue. I'm bad at explaining, so I'll just give some examples.

"I never in a million years thought I'd get to see how beautiful Notre Dame is in person." She gasped. --this should be "...in person," she gasped.

The only time you end with a period is if you don't have anything like 'I said' or 'he whispered' after it. All other times use a comma. And always lowercase the letter after a quote when you do use things like 'he said'.

Agh I feel like a hypocrite cause I only started using the above grammar recently and I haven't bothered to go back and fix my other stories :/

Anyway, this is really good overall! Keep updating :3