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Author [go_girl]
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AliceCullenxoxo
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sorry...i clicked it too many times...ah well at least now u have 3 extra comments
May 19th, 2008 at 11:39pm
AliceCullenxoxo
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you should update soon because this is very good
May 19th, 2008 at 11:38pm
AliceCullenxoxo
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you should update soon because this is very good
May 19th, 2008 at 11:38pm
AliceCullenxoxo
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you should update soon because this is very good
May 19th, 2008 at 11:38pm
GypsyRae
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This story sounds like it might have some potential. I think you need to add more detail, there's a lot of she said, she said, in ch2 when you were describing the schedule, the AKA was amusing only once and then it got quite repetitive. Then there are quite a lot of spelling errors, which makes it hard to read, and some grammar errors, I think you should try going through a spelling/grammar check on your computer before posting. You don't have enough for me to tell whether this is just another vampire story or not, but the prologue sounds like kind of cliché and you admitted yourself that the title does not match the story, so I would suggest changing it when you get a better idea.
May 11th, 2008 at 07:02pm
Slappy
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Nice.
*waits for more*
May 11th, 2008 at 05:18am
epps
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i like it, but i wanna know...is the spelling meant to be written like that?
anyhow...i like it
May 11th, 2008 at 03:55am
AliceCullenxoxo
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I like it! Its good!
May 9th, 2008 at 11:41pm
epps
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its really imaginative, it has a lot of potential. I like it
April 29th, 2008 at 12:32am
matthewdee
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Nice imagery, I feel like I am there.
April 28th, 2008 at 06:14am
HowlerSkeles
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i think you need spell check and you have a lot of mistakes in there like grope instead of group and close instead of clothes.
April 27th, 2008 at 11:50pm
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It's okay, other than the fact that your grammar habits suck.
No offense, but I couldn't understand most of that.
I think I got it okay, though.
I'll keep reading, it sounds like a pretty cool story.
April 27th, 2008 at 05:59am
Elegant Crime
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What's going to happen, this is good.
more soon?
April 21st, 2008 at 04:51pm
epps
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its a really good start, really wanna know more.
continue with it...please
April 12th, 2008 at 03:37am
ohmybob
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Nicce. I want more..
April 10th, 2008 at 11:43pm
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