The Diary of a Natural Girl in a Supernatural World - Comments

@ Hearts_On_My_Arm
This link should work for you: https://www.amazon.com.au/dp/B00JROSH2I

I tried to buy the book front the amazon link but it's not available in Australia apparently. Is there any other way I could get it??

I want Spiros to come back somehow!! haha and A love connection maybe for her (not necessarily with Spiros, I just loved his character) I love how you were able to do the story with out and REAL love or romantic connections though. I just love a good story with just a hint of romance, not all work

@ Erin.Grace.
You read my mind! I am planning a sequel but I am also planning to rewrite this story. I realized it would make more sense if I rewrite it.

IS there going to be a sequel!?! I feel like its ending too soon and you're rushing the ending!

what is she?! and what happens next?! i know you're in college or already graduated but PLEASE update this story soon! it's one of my favorites!XD

this is awesome! please update when you can!

@ beedle the bard
Thank you for the comment. i like constrictive criticism. I see where you are coming from on the comment and I want to story to be funny and I also know that teenagers aren't the most mature so I'm cool with her being shallow-ish. As for the sophistication I'm hesitant to make it too fancy because she is a teenager after all, I don't want her to sound like me... A college senior. So, I'm glad that she does sound her age, that was something I worried about from time to time.

Oh yeah, and I'm glad it flows because honestly I just write what comes in my head when it gets there. And I leave the mistakes as too seem more... Journal like.

Thanks again.

Okay so your writing style isn't the most sophisticated but the summary has got me hooked. I'm a sucker for these kind of stories, where people have to hide their identities and stuff. I really want to know what her powers are! (The layout though is kinda hard to read for me though, perhaps change the text to black and add a white background?)

You really have the internal monologue of a teenage girl down well, but from the first few paragraphs of chapter 1 the main character seems kind of shallow. But anyway it is a really good first chapter. The way you've written it is simple but it flows really well and makes me want to keep on reading. I still really want to know what her 'talents' are, aha.

Overall, well done this is a really cool idea and is well executed :)

What did Cade want!!?? Jeeze please update again very soon!! :)

Hmmm

More, ASAP! I'm addicted and so recommending it!

I see a few errors. they are listed below and the error will be bolded as well as corrected :)

-waste time explaining this later
-prodding me, demanding
-know them, but prying

Otherwise, I'm hooked! I will definitely subscribe!

Lol that last part made me laugh :)

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I really like this story.. it looks like its going to be really good :)