Suburbia - Comments

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I figured that this was going to be one of those usual "eh its so unoriginal and eew high school" stories but like what

its not and omg i love this and you need to update. I really loved the plot because its highschooly but also not and you write it so its really good and i love romantic stories
its so cute
why can't i write like you can
comment swap needs to stop sending me to really good stories because they make feel all cutesy inside :(

Comment Swap brought me over here!

Like the comment below says, the "nothing is the sam." I bet you meant same, but that's only something minor, but should be brought to your attention, haha, the miss of a letter is quite normal though so no worries!

I thought this was cute and I want to read more of it when you post. I'm totally subscribing to this story, no doubt about that!

I thought this embodied Jack in a really clever way and this was just too goofy, but I loved it a lot! Super super great job!

Can't wait for more! :)

Comment swap!
The first thing is that on the intro page you put 'nothing's the sam' and I guess you mean same? It's not that important but thought you might want to know :)
Well, it's definitely an interesting opening, gets you hooked! I'm interested to read more - keep up the good work really.
Only thing is, there's a few grammatical thingies so just read over the chapter a couple times before posting it? But that is such a small criticism because I really enjoyed this!!

I love this! Haha. It was so true to Jack's odd ways. I couldn't help but smile the whole time, but also feel bad for how confused she must have been. It was really well written. I can't wait to read more!

So sorry for spamming you, comment swap is messing up!! >>>>

Hey. comment swap sent me here, this isnt the normal kind of story I would read but its very easy to follow and flows nicely, as well as making me laugh! your layout is really nice as well! :)

Hey. comment swap sent me here, this isnt the normal kind of story I would read but its very easy to follow and flows nicely, as well as making me laugh! your layout is really nice as well! :)

Hey. comment swap sent me here, this isnt the normal kind of story I would read but its very easy to follow and flows nicely, as well as making me laugh! your layout is really nice as well! :)

Although it was a bit short, I really liked it! What a great way to make the new kid feel welcome, huh? I'm looking forward to reading more! Thus really sounds like something I would do LOL!! Please Please update soon!

hahah! very funny! looking forward to more! xx

Very very interesting start! Can't wait to read the next chapter <3

LOL! Now this was a funny read (pregnant, haha oh my), extremely fast but well detailed. Talk about making the new kid at school feel awkward, though I can def see a great story ahead. Despite this being short, it is very well written and really opens up a beginning to a hilarious, yet extremely cute story. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Keep up the great writing.

So short but so funny! Oh my goodness, I've never read an ATL fic but this is amazing. I pull those kind of jokes on my friends too, so funny to read a story where a guy is doing it this time.
Excellent start for your story, I will be subscribing and I can't wait to read more, update soon por favor!

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The story is pretty short but it's really well written. I actually smiled reading this with the whole "You got me pregnant!" thing. The story came off at an excellent start. I'm very curious to know what will happen next. You describe not only the scene well but the characters to. Update soon please? Looking forward to another chapter.

It's a cute start. I like that you went directly in with some action. I don't know who Jack Barakat is, and upon reading some comments, I figure he's someone famous at the least, so I can't say if he's written well, but he got a chuckle from me. I say good luck writing, it's a great open!

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I think that it's a great opener, action straight away, but it could use a re-read and maybe a little more detail, but if you are going for snappy then forget to add extra detail and leave it to the readers imagination. Good luck writing the rest of the story ;D

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This was an interesting story to get. It was very humorous, which was a nice change of pace from most stories that seem to ~srs bsns and angst all the time. Your writing was good, although I think a little more description and background information might be good. That and teh wish for full spaces between paragraphs are the only things I can see wrong. Keep up the good work.

Comment swap brought me here. I'm a Jack Barakat fan, so I'm going to like this. You had good, correct grammar usage, which make this so much easier to read! And your idea is hilarious!! You portray Jack so well. Only thing I'd be worried about is whether you're planning on making the following parts longer? If not, your readers may have something to say about it? At least, I know people complain when my updates are short. I'll be subbing to this and checking back in on this later! :)

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I'm dying, I was laughing so hard. I loved the scenario. The only thing I would recommend would be checking over for spelling errors, and adding spaces between paragraphs. Having one huge chunk of text is a turn off for a lot of people.

But the story line is awesome so far. I love how ridiculous yet believable Jack is. I was cracking up the entire time. :)

Jack screaming about being pregnant and paying child support and.. Agh. Awesome sauce.

Hey, came her via comment swap. I laughed so hard at this. When I first read the part about the shirt, I immediately thought about him pretending to be pregnant. It reminded me so much of my dorky guy friends from high school. So much so that it was just too hilarious. Oh damn and she must to of been some kind of uncomfortable with stranger danger coming in to bother her like that. Hell, she didn't even know his name yet he knew hers. The layout is so cute too. :) Also, I love your short summary. A lot of writers have a difficult time writing up a summary (me being one of them) and it's hard to find someone willing to take the time to write one up. Kudos. XD Lovely story and I will definitely be back for more!

Comment Swapper here!! And Oh My God I love your story. i couldnt stop laughing the whole time i was reading it. The man Jack is so funny whe he demanded she needs to pay child support and then made wendy feel the "baby" kick i almost fell off my chair i was laughing so hard. The picture at the top is so pretty but i have to know where did go to get the Suburbia on it i have been looking for a place to do that for my story and i cant find one, back on topic, the layout i love the roses its so pretty. i hope to read more from you ~Kitty