Jut saw this and love it :D more please?
November 12th, 2013 at 09:03am
I really do love the simple layout, and the story plot too. I've read all the chapters you have posted so far, and all I can say is, bring on the drama!
Although, what happened to her is something severe, I'm just yearning for her to just open up, and finally
tell someone other than the evil witch about her problems. . .
Also, you seem to give away a whole lot in the summary. It might just be me, but I don't think you should give
this much away . . . It would put the readers, more so on the edge if you wouldn't convey the evil mastermind
behind the whole situation at the beginning. Also, the detailed summary on the consequences show the reader
what exactly is going to happen (concerning her family, friends, bf, college life etc.) in the future. It's good to be
vague sometimes, as it creates a great atmosphere for inquisitive readers!
If you are looking for someone to edit, I would love to help you!
I am about to have a busy schedule, as college is about to start, and I'm moving!
I can always find time, as this is a great piece of work.
It shouldn't be tarnished with something as silly as grammar!
Please do keep on writing!
~ Verona :)
