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  • OurLullaby

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    I am way to invested in this story so I need to know what happens xD please update soon. Sorry if this or any other things I comment are too bold or annoying. forgive me.
    xx
    February 5th, 2014 at 02:55am
  • JulieCHEE

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    I'm in love with your character's they seem so really. I love the way you have them interact with each other and with other people. I like the use of description. The story has an effortless feel to it
    February 1st, 2014 at 04:40pm
  • CharlieHunnam

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    You know what? Audrey shouldn't feel bad one bit. She didn't do a damn thing wrong and they aren't technically together. And I hope Konrad does feel like shit because he was dating Stacey, she's not dating Gavin.
    December 3rd, 2013 at 01:49pm
  • OurLullaby

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    This is perfect <3 I've been hunting for a new story without luck but I found this today. You made my day, darling. Thank you for being awesome.
    November 30th, 2013 at 11:32pm
  • ImJustLaya

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    Boy, have I missed this.
    November 9th, 2013 at 04:18pm
  • markme21

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    Omg!! Thank you so much for updating, I have been missing this story!! Keep it coming please. Very Happy
    November 8th, 2013 at 02:53am
  • baybiepnay

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    YAY! I'm so excited you updated! Can't wait for more and to see what happens. I started laughing when he called her a Shiela since I've only heard the bogan ones say it too haha. But still funny lols. UGH to Konrad for being lame -.- he needs to man up and handle already! =]
    November 7th, 2013 at 01:12am
  • SpellsUnderTheStars

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    Well, that happened quickly. And speaking as a citizen of Australia who lives in quite a small country town who has been in the city, I've only ever heard one Aus say Sheila, haha. Only the bogan ones.
    November 6th, 2013 at 11:21pm
  • CharlieHunnam

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    i'm so glad you're updating again! i really missed this story :) this Gavin guy seems kinda shady. i'm gonna keep my eyes on him.
    November 5th, 2013 at 04:55am
  • a walking travesty;

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    Most of the time when I get sent to a story from Comment Swap, I read the first two chapters and comment. That's because they're usually painful and hard to get through. But this, this was perfection.
    To start off, I love the layout. Simple, and beautiful.
    Audrey and Konrad are so alive in their words and actions, that I just feel and understand them. And I actually really like the short, little chapters. They're small glimpses into their lives and it creates a lot of impact for me. Even down to the interesting chapter titles, everything was important and intentional.
    I really enjoyed this, and read everything you had posted and I subscribed.
    Update! You've made me an avid reader. Cute
    October 16th, 2013 at 07:30am
  • CharlieHunnam

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    AAAAHHHHH OMGOSH FINALLY, KONRAD!!
    March 31st, 2013 at 09:31am
  • CaliCupcakeMonster

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    OMG that is sooo cute!!!!
    March 29th, 2013 at 07:18pm
  • ImJustLaya

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    OH MY!! didn't see that coming... well actually I did, but I didn't expect it that way! Super cute! :)
    March 29th, 2013 at 12:58am
  • atomika wave.

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    Chapters could be a lot longer and descriptive concerning the characters' feelings but this story has a lot of potential and is actually very cute!
    March 28th, 2013 at 11:31pm
  • KaeBug

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    Yes!!!!! Finally it happens!! I love how he did it too saying the other girls were rebounds. That was perfect! Update very soon!!!
    March 28th, 2013 at 10:15pm
  • CharlieHunnam

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    mmm i'm so glad you updated! i miss this story :D
    March 26th, 2013 at 04:25am
  • CaliCupcakeMonster

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    Yeah update, Konrad is so silly lol
    March 25th, 2013 at 10:20pm
  • D3miGodB

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    I'm sooo in love with this story.... its pretty darn good , man I am a romantic because of stories like this. and i love Konrad!! lol
    March 25th, 2013 at 08:51pm
  • saeglopur

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    The first thing I noticed within the first chapter is that you switch tenses between the first and second paragraph. Also the beginning of the chapter is a bit on the cliche side, instead of describing her reading the book why not jump right into her glancing at the clock and noting Konrad was late again? The chapter was on the shorter side, and I don't think it had the desired effect of how Konrad cheated on her. You might want to add more detail to her feelings of betrayal, hurt, pain, and suffering, and really dig it in deep that they've been dating and he just cheated on her.
    January 12th, 2013 at 02:37am
  • baybiepnay

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    BEST BIRTHDAY EVER! SO CUTE! everything he gave her was so meaningful and special =] Can't wait for more!
    January 9th, 2013 at 12:39pm