June 9th, 2013 at 05:35pm
Greetings from Comment swap!
I enjoyed this story, and I must say, kudos for packing so much into a small amount of text. I know I would've needed dental chapters to get the story across. But just one thing, when Octavia stars going out with Ryder, I think there should be something to signal a change, like a line of dashes, or ~(insert passage of time here)~, just something to signal the change there.
This is a beautiful story. Nice complexity, which is what I like to see in stories. This is one of the best stories I've read on mibba.
Magnifick. I give you props for that.
Please do read my story----- Mibba