February 12th, 2015 at 12:33pm
The style is definitely very different I will give it that. It doesn’t really pertain to the story but all the excess and extravagant backgrounds actually may have taken from the richness of the story itself. I guess I am just old school but I appreciate a more minimalistic style. Some of the more “free verse” styles of structure and writing. As far as the whole critique thing goes, I would have to say that your descriptive introductions could use a little polishing. Though I definitely can appreciate a foreword to a story, sometimes letting the reader discover facts instead of writing them down forthright can be the most powerful element to a story. In a story such as this however that may not be as important. The most powerful descriptions in a story such as this lay within the characters emotions. However even emotions don’t have to be given up. Personally I like the mystery that lays within the writers mind, as the writer is the only person who really knows their characters.
But you know, it is all just blah blah blah, a story is yours and yours alone. No critique can really do a piece good.
It was a good read. Thanks.
But you know, it is all just blah blah blah, a story is yours and yours alone. No critique can really do a piece good.
It was a good read. Thanks.