Masquerade Feelings - Comments

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I loved the concept of this. It's really alluring for my story preferences. I think we should take this step by step to cover it all, yeah?

Layout; I really liked the layout. It's beautiful, actually. It's easy on the eyes, yet really elegant. Great job. c:

Summary; As mentioned in the previous comments, I think you put a little bit too much information in the summary. It did give me some things to look forward to, but I think it was a bit too informational.

The Concept; like I said, I really like this. I loved how, in the beginning, you gave enough information that it was unnescesarry to read the prequel. That's a quality many many people lack. You, on the other hand, have mastered it. c;

Spelling/Grammar; I didn't notice any mistakes in this general area. I loved that about this, because I could read it swiftly, and not get confused. I must admit, I make quite a few grammar/spelling mistakes, so props for that. c:

Additional qualities; I really loved the description in this. It's flawless. I also loved the mystery feeling I got when I began reading. It's really very interesting.

Overall, this was a phenomenal story. Keep up the good work, love!

Stay Beautiful xxx

Contest Comment: First of all I'd like to say thank you for entering and getting your entry in on time. This was honestly one of the best one-shots I've ever read. It was very well written and it tugged at my heart a bit, which rarely happens to me with stories. I feel so much for Aria and what she went through. Vulcan's brother is a very troubled character and I feel for him as well. I loved this, you did a really great job

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Same thing as before really, you shouldn't put tons of information in the summary that isn't really needed, people will know what is going on from the prequel.

The layout is better, although could use a bigger font instead of constantly switching to the basic one, which lacks the adventure of the story for me. Again, very well written and I loved the description.

Just damn girl. Xd The cover and the layout fit the story amazing well. The summary pulled me in right away and the chapter itself was well-written with a beautiful twist. I liked your interesting descriptions and the info given about your characters. That was without a doubt a kick-ass oneshot. <3333

Just damn girl. Xd The cover and the layout fit the story amazing well. The summary pulled me in right away and the chapter itself was well-written with a beautiful twist. I liked your interesting descriptions and the info given about your characters. That was without a doubt a kick-ass oneshot. <3333

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So, I think I mentioned this in the comment for another one of your stories, but the summary should be void of any and all extra information. The summary is all that it needs.

Wow, I loved this story! It's one of the best one shots I ever read. I truly wish this could have been done by chapters to keep it going. In a way, I wish Cole hadn't did suicide and that he could have lived. I like the lesson you also had throughout this story. Comment swap bought me here and I'm happy it did!

This was amazing! The summary really drew me in to the one shot and the banner and layout is gorgeous. You should be proud of this because it’s really good! :D I loved the twist of it being Cole and not Vulcan. And i have to admit, i really like the name Vulcan; it sounds Transylvanian :)
- Steph xx

I was completely in love with te banner, the summary, and story. It was tragic, but really good. I at one point felt bad for Cole. But man...that was a bit of a twist. Vulcan having a twin brother, and to top it off him being obsessed with Aria.

I loved the names by the way!

Wow. Your summary really drew me in. This story was amazing. I was on edge, wondering who Cole was. I wasn't expecting him to commit suicide at the end. But I'm glad Aria got out safe.

I agree with the comments below. The hair pretty much gave it away that Cole wasn't Vulcan and yet Aria still followed him. But from what I read in the last paragraph, I can tell she learned her lesson.

Great one-shot!

The summary was captivating and I liked the info you wrote along with the summary like what was your inspiration, disclaimer and all. The chapter itself was amazing and it drew me in completely. I have to agree with the other comment, she should have never followed the masked man outside and I was glad she was safe in the end. Great oneshot.

The summary was captivating and I liked the info you wrote along with the summary like what was your inspiration, disclaimer and all. The chapter itself was amazing and it drew me in completely. I have to agree with the other comment, she should have never followed the masked man outside and I was glad she was safe in the end. Great oneshot.

I now know why you could not wait for my comment.
You, really know how to make someone feel in the atmosphere of you're stories you write. I am glad of the ending and that Aria was safe in the end but sad Aria was broken so much. However the girl in the story Aria, was naive from the ball she went to, and from the moment the hair was a give away it was hard to believe why she done anything, if she had such gut instincts that she 'knew' she should go with. Anyway, Excellent story, I hated it and loved it at the same time.. Yours sincerely, Erico