To Be Alone With You - Comments

Oh my god, I loved this. I have been waiting for her to quit and leave behind that creepy boss of her's. I honestly cannot wait for when she goes back to Tempe just to see how everything is. I also want to know what Charlotte was going to say when she said "you haven't been back snce-". Loved the update as always, update soon!

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I just have to say that your layout is gorgeous. So simple yet so elegant. I always love it like that. And the first chapter's intro really hooked me in. Your way of cascading a picture into the reader's mind is magnificent and I don't think I've ever been so captivated by many authors here on Mibba. You have earned your respect by me and...goodness, this is just beautiful. Good luck!

I must start by saying your layout is beautiful!! I knew right away that this would be a good story. One of my favorite aspects of your writing is the description. Everything is so beautifully described and I could really visualize it. I always look for something like that in stories, so well done! This story seems really interesting, can't wait to read more!

Although I understand how John is feeling and just wanting to not be lonely, I don't think it's the right thing to keep stringing her along. And I'm sure Macy has her own personal problem as to why she's still sticking with him, but I feel John should definitely cut the ties. I mean if he really doesn't want to feel lonely he could just spend time with his family or try investing time in a new hobby. Anyway, I loved it update soon!

I feel bad for Macy but I guess I'm fine with it too...
This chapter's really interesting and I really wanna know more about
Macy and John (hopefully one day their paths cross with Josselyn?)

I feel like th fact that Kennedy is the first person she wants to and does call when she needs to get her mind off of things has to say something. I mean I don't know. I guess I just want them to get together because agh. Loved it, as always update soon!

Josselyns boss gives me the creeps haha

I loved the feel of this story. Right when the page loaded I knew it was going to be interesting. Very nice layout, I love your summary - it gives you a little bit, but not too much - I love the fact that this is told from three different POV's, that's really new.The only problem I had was reading the font, it's really little in the beginning, probably due to the italicizing.

John seems cute, haha. "Is this how you pick up girls?" That's adorable. I feel like you've got really rounded characters in this story and I kinda want to read more. Learning about one person really wasn't enough.

The details in this story are amazing! I like the past/present thing you have going on, as well as your writing style in general. The plot is easy to follow, and the layout is simple but lovely. Plus, I love me a good love story. Keep up the good work! :)

Hi Hi okay so I just found this story and devoured it. Seriously it's amazing!! I absolutely love your writing style and everything is so vivid and wow, just wow. I'm in love. Can't wait to read more!!

Okay, first of all, where are all of the comments at? This story is freakin' amazing and deserves more praise!

Secondly, you are a terrific writer! Seriously. Everything flows so nicely and your word choices are great and your use of description is so wonderful that I actually feel as if I'm there experiencing what everyone else is feeling and you portray all of the guys very well.

Third, I'm only on chapter four but JOHN THAT WAS MEAN YOU DIDN'T HAVE TO CALL JOSSELYN A HEARTLESS BITCH. I don't know what she did to make him feel that way yet, but I'm gonna continue to read on and be mad at him.

Finally, you're awesome.

Comment Swap brought me here.

I am so glad that I was given a The Maine fan fiction, and in my own opinion; Comment Swap couldn't have chosen a better one than this.

The detail that you go into when describing everything is fantastic! I really do love how you write each character, especially John - I definitely think that you got his personality down to a tee :D

The layout is so pretty, it blends well with the story and the text isn't too crammed in or too small.

You've done an excellent job with this fic so far, I can't wait to see where you take it :D

I was completely not expecting John to have a girlfriend. I'm really curious now to see what she's like (specially compared to josselynn) and to see the relationship between John and her. Can't wait for the next update, and I'll be sure to listen to your playlist soon!

so good!

Why do I keep feeling like she's running away? I mean yeah we still don't know what exactly happened between John and her but with this chapter and her not wanting to continue or thinking that it's sensible to break it off, I can't help but wonder if she had similar thoughts when she was with John. I really love this story, like you have no idea. I'm always left wondering what's going to happen next and I love that. Update soon!

The first paragraph was beautiful and really captivated me. I love rain and so that paragraph really stood out to me and I felt it was really beautifully written.

Moving on to the rest of the story, I think it is written fantastically well. There is a great balance between dialogue and description that doesn't leave the reader bored.

However, with the jumping forwards and to different places, I was getting sort of confused. Just as I was getting into one scene, it seemed to switch to another. Although, I do think that this is a great writing style, I feel the scenes need to just be a tad longer so I don't feel like I'm jumping everywhere. That might just be my opinion.

Other than that I feel you are doing a great job! Keep it up!

As much as I really want her and Kennedy to date, I feel like he's gonna get himself into a big mess with it. I mean he's gonna go on a date with his bandmate's exgirlfriend and not tell him. Also, I can't help but worry that whatever happened between John and her will repeat with Kennedy and josselyn. Loved it, (and I really liked how it got changed into Kennedy's point of view, not that I don't love John and her's perspective.) update soon!

Oh. My. Gosh. I don't even know what to think. I definitely knew Kennedy and her would end up doing something, but I did not see John standing there coming at all, and just. Wow. Okay, update soon, I need to find out what john's thinking oh my gosh! Loved it!

Well damn. John is going to be pissed off.

Ah, two weeks later, aha!

This story really is lovely. The layout is gorgeous and I love the quote that you added to the summary. And I adore the fact that this is a The Maine fanfic, I love them so much.

I think you did a good job of capturing how the boys actually are in the story, if that makes sense. I liked how you kept true to them because lots of writers seem to make up the personality as they go.

I actually liked the past part of the chapters better than the present. First of all, I liked them because you go to see into their lives and their past a bit more, which I always love, and they seemed more descriptive and seemed to flow better. The present part was a bit wordy in lots of places and it didn't seem like it flowed as well as it could have.

Overall though, well done with this and I look forward to seeing what else you write! :)