It's Only a Dance Step - Comments

For some reason this story seems like it could be really interesting but I keep getting a really monotone feeling from the first chapter especially. The girl doesn't seem very happy or tired, there is no extreme and it sorta threw me off.

You need to space out your dialogue. After any "she said" or "I asked", tap your enter button twice before starting a new line of dialogue or story.

I don't think you should have jumped right into the girl telling about herself, I think a bit more description about her surroundings and how tired she may have been as she left the studio would be good.

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Right off the bat, the layout hurts my eyes. A lot. The photo isn't easy to see either. You might want to proofread your work a bit and tweak the grammar especially. There are some plural words you gave apostrophes, sentence fragments and misplaced commas, etc. The writing itself seems a bit scatterbrained, partially because of the sentence fragments, though maybe that's how the main character genuinely behaves/thinks.
Other than mechanics, your story seems interesting and the characters have very obvious personalities of their own, which is always great to see. Keep it up!

Really liked this chapter!! By the end I was really liking her anger!! the 2weeks out of school thing seems a bit drastic though!! like wow! haha but this is goo, liked the long chapter :)

@ Erin.Grace.
Thank you for your comments!! Reallyy love themmm!!! New chapter will probobly be up in a bit or so! =)

Oh snap! whats gonna happen next!!??!!

Really liking this so far! wish the chapters were a little longer but other then that :)