What Lies Beyond - Comments

Okay the beginning's a lot better then I originally thought it was going to be. That's horrible to say, I know but everyone knows that the first chapter of a horror story is always bad. Yours was actually pretty good although, I thought more was going to happen then him pass out. However, I'm completely intrigued to find out what exactly made him past out. How could just a beer or so make you pass out? :P

@red plaid pantz!! Thank you!!(:

Some of the word choices are repetitive but it's definitely a unique story! Very mysterious and I really hope you keep posting more chapters because it's got me hooked so far :) You're doing a great job so far. You have a talent for writing

Good plot line so far! Can't wait to read more