Red Roses - Comments

I really love just cutesy stories that are just nice to read yknow, its just fun without trying to be anything else, and this is definitely one of those! Eve and Jay are both intriguing characters however still likeable which you need in a story like this, I really like this keep it up!

I like this so far. The layout is inviting, when I opened it I was immediately drawn in. Lets see...I like your character names they work well together. Eve and Jay, how cute! And I like the slight mystery to Jay's character, however there was one line that was very confusing to me.

"You could stare into his eyes and see everything there was to know about him there. Except you would never know him by just looking into his eyes."

That line suggests that you can see everything about him by looking into his eyes and then immediately revokes that by insisting that you could not possibly know everything about him by looking into his eyes. But that's minor. Also I saw you misspelled Shining at one point. This is also a minor mistake though. Keep up the good work. I'm subscribing.

To start off, I love your layout. It's so warm and friendly and sweet, perfect for love. The banner is adorable. It is not distracting in any way; I personally can't stand when the layout distracts from the overall natural glamor of the story itself.

Anyway.

Upon reading the summary, I expected a cute, almost fluffy read :D And that's exactly what I got! It makes me happy when the description actually corresponds with what the author is trying to get across.

I really liked the conversation between Jay and Eve. It was a cute, playful banter and had an easy flow. I also appreciated the fact that you did not have any grammar errors in your story, because those usually distract me from the reading.

Overall, I find this story very interesting! :) It's a great start! Good luck with this in the future!

I like the idea behind this story - it's very cute! One of the things I can't get past, though, is how and why Jay just magically shows up. But if everyone knows where Eve is, could he have just shown up...? I don't know - it's too early to tell if it's a plot device or not, and it's gnawing at me.

I like your writing. It flows and there aren't any distracting grammatical/spelling errors. In fact, I didn't find very much to critique on.

The one thing I would recommend is details. You brush over the basics - hair color, personality - but it still feels kind of lacking.

I'll be subscribing - I can't wait to see how this one goes!

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I really liked this. It's one of the very few stories written like this that I loved. It was extremely easy to follow, and the plot is great. You really could go far with this! Keep updating! I'll definetly be subscribing and recommending this for other people to read. It's phenomenal!

Awash :) How sweet :D can't wait for more!

awww Vee!♥I'm litterally tearing up here! firstly, because this chapter was quite emotional and secondly because of your little note...♥:) stopppppp I love you too best friend!

aww it's so cute. i like the first glimpse at the personalities of each character thus far, they're all really charming! :D haha. cute Vee, darn right cute.

continue, continue, continue!

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Definitely a story I want to keep reading, our writing seems similar which is a really good thing. This story definitely has potential. It's not a story that would bore someone whereas my stories do. You get really descriptive when writing which lead to me being able to picture the characters, places, etc already even in the first chapter. This story is a story I’ve been looking for to read. I'm definitely going to subscribe and recommend this to others. This story is a story that I like to read. It’s really amazing how our writing is somewhat similar this is amazing though because it will definitely help me when writing as well because I have problems with my punctuation and this will most likely inspire me for more ideas too. I cannot wait to read more chapters. This just sucks that comment swap has to be over 200+ characters lol. But overall to me this story is perfect. It’s gonna be a cute story. You already have a problem occuring in the second chapter so shiz is definitely going to go down and I know this is not the only problem that will happen. I have a fat feeling there are going to be tons and tons of more drama filled chapters. lol. Keep up the good work:) ~Brittany