White Rabbit - Comments

Great story. I was totally into it. And the twist really got me. I love it!

Thanks for entering my contest. I'll message the results when I'm done judging.

I just realized that I never commented on your stories like I said I would since you came in first in my contest. I'm so sorry! I feel terrible that it has taken me this long.

Anyway, I was not expecting the ending at all but it was so good! I like how you tied in Alice in Wonderland with what was really happening in his life (the white rabbit being the doctor's coat). The story followed the storyline of AIW really well - except for the diversion at the end but like I said, I really liked it. It was a sad ending but interesting so it didn't seem as sad as it could have been (if that makes sense lol).

And I will start reading your other story so I can hopefully comment on it soon!

I wasn't expecting that at all. Avenged Sevenfold and Alice In Wonderland, that's such a unique concept and you did an impeccable job with this story. It was incredible. Seriously. Amazing writing, it had me hooked right from the summary. I did not see that ending coming but it was a great twist. This has definitely made it on my list of favorites. [:

oh my god.

this is totally not the ending i expected. but i love it. (not that he died, obviously, but you know what i mean.) and the last line is just perfect.. like throughout the dream he'd been following the page/the doctor, thinking he would save him, but he was actually the one to "kill" him. if i have that right. i'm sort of confused as i'm typing this, trying to figure out exactly what it means. all i know is that i love the symbolism there. i'd been wondering what was going on that he was having this dream, but i hadn't expected that.

this story was just amazing. seriously. you're a teriffic writer, and i mean that.

Perfect. Literally perfect! I actually, for some odd reason, wasn't expecting it to take the turn that it did. Reading the first 2 chapters, I assumed that he was dreaming or hallucinating. I didn't even consider that this is what was happening and I love that. LOVE! Thank you for writing this <3

Wow. Just... wow. Words can't describe how magnificent this is. I'm declaring this story my favorite piece on this site, with no doubt in my mind that that is the simple truth. You have no idea of how long I've been sitting here trying to figure out exactly what to say. I'm a person of many words, but you've managed to leave me speechless with that perfect talent of yours. I don't think my heart ever beat this fast - it's still racing. I just... where did you come from? This story is just too brilliant to be real. ;-; I really, really hope you win the contest and I just wish I could recommend and comment a thousand times because you deserve much more than what you're getting. Because this whole community deserves to read this and feel as amazing as I'm feeling right now.
Again: Bravo. Magnifico. Estupendo.
I give you a standing ovation.
<3

I absolutely love this story, but I'm so sad that Zacky is actually dead :-( Oh man, why would he overdose? :-(

I'm guessing that the flash of the doctor's white lab coat signifies the white rabbit

First of all - Cheshire Cat *-* I absolutely love that thing and I was quite exceptionally pleased with how you described and recreated the character, not that I ever doubted your abilities to do it.
I find this story to be the most impressive piece of writing I've ever found on mibba. Everything is just so magical I feel as though I am Zacky's shadow following him down those beautiful woods of fantasy. And like I said before, the descriptions are as mind-blowing as can be. Everything is as clear as water in my head and you are able to make everything sound incredibly stunning and bright and colorfully dark and unreal as the world of wonderland ever seemed to me. Calling this story unrealistic is the greatest compliment I can give you, because that means to me you portrayed the original Alice's world like most people would certainly never be able to.
Bravo. I can't wait for more (':

the Cheshire Cat. <3 you're including everything. I love it.

can't wait for the next chapter, although I am sad that it's the last.

Where do you come from? Seriously. You are absolutely brilliant.

Loved it.

absolutely love this. alice in wonderland featuring zacky vengeance? who would've thunk it. and once again you manage to surprise me with your extremely unique fanfics.

I love Alice in wonderland and obviously I love avenged sevenfold, so naturally I'm finding this pretty amazing. you already know what I think of your writing. but this story is a bit different than your others. the details are perfect - especially your descriptions of both the surroundings and the other characters.

I don't know how long of a story this is going to be, but I'm so glad to see that it's not finished yet. can't wait to read more!

Oh dear.... are you even from this planet? :o This is just preposterously perfect! I believe I just fell in love ._. You are with no doubt an amazing, marvelous, super talented writer. Those descriptions were completely mind-blowing and the whole piece is so enthralling I could read it forever. I can’t wait for more! Just asdfghjklç!
Beautiful.

Just when I think your writing can't get any more perfect...how do you do this? Just how? I love being able to picture exactly what I'm reading and this was just amazing! And is it my new favorite story? HECK YES <3

i absolutely love this so far, and damn Zacky must have the hangover from hell if he didn't even twitch at talking to a smoking caterpillar lol

I have a visual image of Jimmy as the Mad Hatter :-)

This is amazing so far! I love how you get the characters spot on, and just.. wow.. it's amazing. Can't wait to read some more.

I loved it.