omg omg omg omg omg omg omg. no not enough omg omg omg omg omg omg omg oomg omg omg omg omg omg omg wow this is soooooooooo goood so far i love it keep it up
This story has potential, it really does, but it does need some work. Your first chapter seems a bit confusing, you kinda went back and forth between first and third points of view. I'm hoping to see some great development from your characters because it is often seen in stories the girl outcast and the popular boy (or vice versa). I think it would have made much more sense to start the story at the beginning, maybe when they were kids (since they obviously go to school together) or maybe when they first met online or something. It would give it more understanding than having the story start in the middle and having the feelings jumping into 'I love you's so quickly.
I hope my comment doesn't sound too bad towards your story and I hope you do work on it cause I would love to continue reading this. :)