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  • The Color Abi

    The Color Abi (300)

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    Jack is getting some action, YEAH!
    December 19th, 2012 at 01:39am
  • Pen'sbestfriend12

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    i agree with the color abi, you do need to work on grammar. I think this is a great story so far, though :] I can't wait to see what else you have to write
    December 18th, 2012 at 07:07pm
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    Jack's in love.
    December 18th, 2012 at 12:52am
  • The Color Abi

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    I like this story but, you really need to work on your grammar and maybe adding more description. Either way, it seems like a great little plot you have going on!
    December 18th, 2012 at 12:31am
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