Maybe I Wasn't Enough - Comments

@ ponyboy curtis
As mentioned before, I have considered rewriting it. But I've never really gotten around to it or anything, my interests have evolved since I decided to write this. But maybe one day! Thank you for your comment, it made my day. :)

Right off the bat I noticed some spelling errors, and the events in the first chapter moved too quickly. Why was her father such a bad person? I would've liked a little more development on that but I noticed in your comments you've said it was your first story you let anyone read, and I know I have stories like that too. I'd definitely be interested in reading a re-write, even though I don't listen to PTV.

I do like the mini celebration between the family- it's such a relief to have such a toxic person out of your life. I'd also like to know why they were leaving if her father had already left.

A little more character development for Izzy would be nice, but I liked that she made a new friend already. I think it's sweet she hugs the boys immediately upon meeting them. Izzy meeting Tony was cute, especially the fact that they both felt a connection.

The small details, such as her climbing across the lattice, and picking the lock with a bobby pin added a nice touch. And, Izzy being briefly disappointed in Mike for questioning her love of Harry Potter was great. She seems like a very strong woman.

From what I've read so far, you've got a good start, and I don't know if you're planning on rewriting it, but you should think about it because it's pretty good!

@ KINGKA
It's amazing I'm still getting comments on this. Heh. xD

Yeah, it's definitely not one of my best works but it was one of the first I ever let anyone read, so I'm proud of it.
I've been thinking about going back and editing, or rewriting it all together but haven't really been bothered to.

Thanks for your comment though!

Brought here by comment swap!

I always have a weak spot for characters with a realistic tragic back story. I liked the first chapter because that's what it was. Your grammar was a bit off, but it didn't take away from the basic storyline.

Now that I've finished reading the second chapter, I have to say I like it a bit more now. It sad that she left one friend behind, but I was happy that she made a new one right away.

I don't know anything about the group you're writing about, but I may continue reading. Keep up the good work!

@ Ca20000
This was really really sweet of you. I've been debating whether or not to take this down or not, because I finished it way before I started taking any classes on writing and had no clue what to do. Thanks for the comment, though. It meant a lot and I kinda got off of my train of thought while replying. :p

This is my comment swap
And it sounds like a really good story. I didn't read all of it because there are a lot of chapter but sounds good. Izzy is a great character. I love her and she is like my favorite.

I don't usually read romance fan Fics but this is good.

It was sad when Sam died and izzy was cheated on as well.

So just to say you did really well on this story and loved it xxxxxx

Wow very good and very moving loved it and do continue to write other story's xx

I got here by comment swap and I must say, this was simply beautiful. The changes Izzy goes through and the struggles she endures were flawless. After all of it, she's a better person and learned that it gets better and life goes on, as you said yourself.

I saw a few spelling and grammar mistakes but nothing big enough to take away from the story and the detail was brilliant.

I really enjoyed this and I am glad that Izzy had a happy ending. :)

Xoxo,
Harley

I enjoyed this! (:

I wasn't exactly that fond of your writing style, but the plot line was great. Obviously, comment swap brought me here. I found myself struggling a bit with the amount of dialogue as I like more description than dialogue, but it was nicely written. I've never listened to Pierce the Veil before, but I had heard of them and this definitely gave me a nice idea of who they were and I quite liked it. I did love how you ended it, though. It was a nice touch that I don't really come across often. I was quite fond of it. Good job, love.

Comment swap!

I enjoyed this, even though I've never heard a Pierce the Veil song in my life, haha. I loved all the dialogue you put into this and I love your writing style. I could read this over and over again!

Wow, I loved it!

@ blessedbybroken
Ohmygod. Thank you so much. You have no idea how much tht really means to me. <3

lol, it's official, I'm in love with your writing. I just started this and I'm hooked! I read Southern Constellations and loved it so I came here and am feeling the same. You're awesome <3

*Comment Swap*
I liked your story, and that's saying something because I'm not usually one for FanFictions about Bands. I felt like some paragraphs were kind of choppy and there could've been more description, but I liked it. It was a good story, and there's a good message behind it.

I really really really really really really love this story it's so good. How did u think of the idea? I think it's great that you can even think of writing such a good story. It's awesome because I am a sucker for romances and all................. But any who this is soo goo dand since I am new to mibba I will deffinetly read it and am happy that I was sent to this page. It's sooo good ................. honestly go publish it it's that good......................

awesome

i really enjoyed reading this! <3

CS: I really liked this, the layout is simple yet eye catching and easy to read of. You have added just the right amount of description and acctully made me care about the characters. Your're a good writer, well done

From the comment swap.
The best thing about this is that it's finished. There are so may work in progresses and abandoned on this site, it drives me crazy sometimes.
I love your writing. It's absolutely beautiful. Everything flowed nicely, and I didn't catch any grammatical mistakes so far. I love where you're taking this, and everything is so wonderfully original.
Great job. I'll be reading on for sure.