My Sweeny Todd - Comments

I just read this all in one sitting and holy fuck...it was so hood!

@ missinvisible2013
Okay :)

@ M_Courtney_R

Nah it's fine :)

@ missinvisible2013
Oh, I'll comment on another if you want?

@ M_Courtney_R

This actually isn't my story but it's all good I forgot I was still an author on it so it's my fault ...

All credit for this story goes to it's author LOstIn_Lights I just went through and changed some spelling mistakes and stuff for her

Hello, I don't have time to read through the full story but I have just had a read through your first chapter.

What I Liked:
1. I love the friendship between Moonlight and Devin, most MIW stories have the two characters meet in the first chapter and then fuck in the second. But because your characters already have a friendship bond in place it means that you can do so much more with the storyline.
2. I laughed at the bit when Chris fixed Moonlights make-up simply because it seems like something he would do.
3. I like how you go into detail with certain points in the story. You've got the amount of detail to include perfect, not too much and not too little.

Mistakes:
1. You put 'Sure in me head I called her more than a stupid bitch' It should say ' Sure in my head I've called her more than a stupid bitch'
2. You put 'On the way to come get me Devin must had explained my situation' It should say 'On the way to come get me Devin must have explained my situation'

I really did love the first chapter, when I get time I'll read the rest :)

@ L0stIn_Lights

Your welcome just let me know if there's anything else I can help you with

@ missinvisible2013
Glad you read it over for me! Xx and thank you I worked hard on it :)

Absolutely loved this :) so glad that I got to read it ... Amazing work

@ Kerny
pff, kerny

Hii sami

Holy fucking shit. I'm so in love with this and I'm crying with that ending :( I completely love this story though.

@ we_are_the_undead
dOn'T fReAk OuT! I DiD nOtHiNg

omfg wHAT DID YOU DO EKGFNEWINGRWOENG

@ L0stIn_Lights
:OOOOOOOOOOOOOO

@ keyboards
Read the sequel!

Oh wait did she die?

Oh my fucking god, I gasped so loud at the end, SHE DIED WHYYYY great story though:3

Yayy! <3@ L0stIn_Lights

@ love-underthegun-xxx
You don't have to! Just posted the first chapter because I got bored ^~^