Defiance - Comments

The pissing contest and bickering between Tank and Logan (MEEEEEEEE) always makes me laugh. I love it so much. And I also love that I know what's happening in the next chapter...DERYAN! BE A MANLY FOX, YEAH!

I loved it! I am so intrigued by William, his hatred for other vampires, and the comment about makers, has me so curious. I'm excited to see what his backstory is! And I just love Deryan, I'm not even sure why, I just adore him. And Tank and Logan's banter always makes me snicker. So much tension there. I can't wait to read about what they find out at the clubs, and their experiences going in. I just love this story so much!!

THE FIGHTING CHAPTER! I have been waiting and waiting for this. No matter how many times I read this, it's still so great. And the fact that these guys were beaten by human girls is just magical. BOO YEAH BEASTIES! Love this <3

God I love the bickering with Tank. Cracks me up every time. I figured I should leave a comment just in case you'd forgotten how much I absolutely LOVE this story. And i'm so freaking excited that it's up to unposted chapters now. Like, stupidly excited!

Can I just say that one of my favorite things about this is the bickering with Tank? The banter is so perfect. Thank you for updating, I LOVED IT!

Just sneaking back onto mibba to read your updates ;)

“I swear to god, if Tank continues to follow me around I am going to brand my cross right into his fucking forehead,” Logan muttered as we made our way to the kitchen.
Lines like this absolutely slay me bahaha.

Yeah eccentric. That's one way to describe a craving for horse hearts.

My eyes grew wide at the sight before me. “Dude, put some clothes on!”
NAKED DEMON. I'M TRYING NOT TO PICTURE THAT AND GET DISTRACTED, BUT IT'S HAPPENING. IT'S TOTALLY HAPPENING.

I had heard that some people were burned alive or their eyes melted from the inside.
Super. Sounds just super to stumble across a Demon in their true form. Definitely putting that on my bucket list :/

“At least he has a nice butt,” Logan muttered as she dug into her ice cream.
I imagine he does. Ok, imagining it again.
Damn, why am I switching between being grossed out and disturbed, to picturing naked Dmitri? I'm so confused with my feelings. It must be the serious danger to life aspect making him attractive. Geez I am really messed up and feel like I should have stopped typing a while ago. I totally blame your writing skillz.

“What are you, my great grandfather?”
That whole bit though. THIS WHOLE STORY. The Grandfather jokes never get old, they're hilarious.

I feel like I say this with every chapter I read/re-read, but THIS IS MY FAVOURITE.
You know what, it's because I love the all bloody equally. I can't help myself. I really do.

"Uh, Onolee, love, do you mind?" I heard Tank ask as I was turning on the overhead lights.
I will forever love this. The fact that Tank thinks he's the shit, the cats whiskers, the bollocks, but he has to be invited inside bahaha. I just love the banter between him and Onolee though. It's hilarious/brilliant/sitty/perfect.

William freaks me out a little, like I guess he should, but he just has this damn sexy allure. I can't help it!

And what pawnsinplay said!
"You're over six hundred years old. People shouldn't be calling you Tank. They should be calling you grandpa," Logan simply stated.
This line cracks me up. I can read it a thousand times and it would still crack me up.

“You’re over six hundred years old. People shouldn’t be calling you Tank. They should be calling you grandpa,” Logan simply stated. This never gets old!

I've said it a million times, but I absolutely love the way that you write. It's so flawless. And no matter how many times I read this, I love it even more.

I'm so confused right now. I wasn't informed about this story being updated ever since I first read the prologue and then I find this in my subscriptions page a year later and realize there were other chapters posted and I never got to read them. I'm so sad, especially because I'm completely hooked after reading these last two chapters and considering I had been so excited when I first read the prologue. Why am I such a dumb little shit? ;_;

This story is so good, omg. I don't even know what to say. pawnsinplay and archipelago. have portrayed my feelings quite perfectly, I think. This became one of my favorite stories with just three chapters, ok? You're an amazing writer; are you even real? Can I begin to worship you now?

I'm sorry I'm being a creep, but this fucked me up.

Don't forget to update!

YES I LOVE THIS CHAPTER.

Nikolai is such a boss. In every sense of the word haha.

I peered into the dark abyss. Fear prickled at the base of my neck. At this point I was sure Nikolai was trying to murder us.
When Onolee is scared I'm terrfied, because she's never bloody scared.

Damn it Raychel, I want to highlight the whole bloody chapter again. I just love how your characters intereact with each other. There's always an underlying threat (or more obivious one) to their words and it's both hilarious and scary.

Nope I can't deny it. I love Tank ok? Ok. He's an arse and a jerkface but I can't help myself.

“Watch it Douglas,” I warned.
And I love it when Onolee calls him Douglas bahah.

“Oh no. We are not some fucking superhero squad. Do you really expect this to work?”
Best fucking superhero squad in the west if you ask me. And probably the most dysfunctional.

“As the only human, I’m not doing this alone. I want someone else from my team. Someone that I can trust with my life. I want Logan.”
YES I LOVE LOGAN! Crap I think I love everyone. You know that means you can't kill anyone right? No really, I'm already too attached damn it.

And I like The Alliance for the groups name! It's pretty strong and bold!

The Alliance is not lame! It's the truth, they are in an alliance, it's perfect and don't you ever think or say otherwise! I love the way you describe people and situations, being able to easily visualize everything as I'm reading it just makes it that much more amazing.

ENEMIES BEWARE, LOGAN'S A-COMIN.

Yes to what pawnsinplay said! I could read this a million times and still be excited to read it. I just want you to publish a bloody book already so I can have the physical copy and carry it around with me like a baby. Is this getting weird? I don't even care.

“Alright, you big fucker,” I pulled my leather jacket closer around me as I walked towards my kill.
Onolee is such a lady bahaha. I love her.

“Dammit Onolee, you knew I wanted this one.” He was muttering under his breath. I caught a couple of words quite clearly: fucking moron.
I love how concerned Ricky is for his sisters safety. No 'did you get hurt taking down a monster?' or 'I made you dinner while you were out hunting things for me'. LOL.

I think I might have mentioned this in my original comment for this chapter, but I love the whole part about how the werewolf turned out to be a teenage boy. Obviously I don't love the fact a teenager got killed! But after all the badassery it showed that Onolee (and Ricky) have morals and human emotion even though it hinders them to have either.

I just love it all so much. You write as though it comes as easily as breathing and it makes me bloody jealous!

It doesn't matter that I've read this already. It doesn't matter how many times I've read it, I still love it so much. Your writing is perfect. And even though I know what's going to happen next, I still can't wait to read it!

I'm holding in my laughter. Holding it in. I'M JUST TOO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!

LOL.

Excellent question in your author's note. You silly goose. But moving on to how excited I am.

I AM SO EFFING EXCITED THAT THIS IS BACK, YOU LITERALLY HAVE NO IDEA. YOU GOT THIS. YOU GOT THIS IN THE BAG!

What has it been, like basically four years since you last updated? ERM, DON'T MAKE ME WAIT THAT LONG AGAIN OK? OK.

“Give up, grandpa?” Logan taunted as she broke another vertebrae in Tank’s back.
Logan cracks me up, even when she's being shockingly violent.

I got so immersed reading I forgot to highlight parts. Can I just highlight the whole thing? The fights were so cool and your description is always so perfect I can see the scene playing out in my head. For a minute I thought Deryan wouldn't be able to control himself and might scratch Onolee. And the fight between William and Dmitri was really disgusting. Dmitri is pretty terrifying.

I'm always so impressed reading this that you've taken the age old werewolves and vampires genre and created something so unique and fresh. The demons help haha.

Oh and I love the banter between Tank and the girls. Always funny!

"C’mon grandpa, afraid to get beat by a girl?"

I still snicker at this line. It's fabulous. The whole damn THING is fabulous. The way you described the fighting was so realistic, I could imagine everything perfectly. Favorite chapter so far, but I think you already knew that. Thank you for updating! So looking forward to the next one! <3

Oh how I have MISSED this! Such a good chapter! I knew all of them fighting would be greatly entertaining, fucking KNEW it. This is such a great story, I get so into the chapters you post, then I get to the end and I'm just left wanting more. Badly.

Thank goodness for breaks! Hopefully you can get another update or two out on this before you have to go back for the new semester. ... Before I have to go back for the new semester... Bleck.

Loved it dear!

Hahaha oh Ricky, “I’m going to look sixteen forever which means I can’t fucking get into these places.” The struggle.

I loved the way you explained Nikolai and thepresence he brings to the table. I also like how, as bad ass Onolee is, she still has disadvantages (the labyrinth)-- like, she's not perfect and all powerful, ya know?

Ugh, the dialogue in this story is perfect. I loved this “You have got to be fucking kidding me. A human that depends on her vampire brother to survive,” the demon spoke darkly. “How fucking precious.”

I've come to realize that I cannot miss a single word because it's all very important. Ugh, I love this story so hard. It's amazing, you're amazing. This thing is like a freaking novel. I applaud you and your creativity!

I don't understand why I haven't discovered this story sooner. I seriously already got so excited to read this just looking at the characters. I even went googly-eyed at the female characters! I also love this layout, it totally sets the mood.

Okay, Onolee is possibly the coolest, most bad ass girl ever. She's so damn witty and full of spunk. I also really like Ricky and Onolee's relationship.

Oh and your writing. Woooo, you're writing is wonderful. I love your descriptions and how you just create this world of 'dysfunctional' darkness of monsters and shiz. I'm only on the second chapter, but I seriously love this story.