Pft.. No words. I don't understand what El thought she was going to get out of felling Nialler. That boy didn't deserve to be hurt. But then I can understand why he was hurt, seeing as neither Lou or Tori told him about what happened before Tori and Niall started seeing each other. Nice update :)
I just realized that my profile pic said "hipsta please", but sorry everyone no I'm not a one direction fan. I used because I can't said "nigga please" in school with out getting caught.
I founded this story today and really glad I decided to read it. Your character remind me of myself and my best friend, with me definatly being Iris. Recommended and Subscribed :)
Okay I think you may of guessed but I'm not exactly a One Direction fan. But, like I said I'll read anything. So, I've read through the first two chapters. Here's my thoughts:
Both OC's, are loveable. Firstly, Iris. She seems like a very strong minded woman. I think that me and her would get along (If she was real of course) I could be wrong but she seems like the sort of girl that knows what she wants and will do anything it takes to get it. Secondly, Victoria. I feel like she's the complete opposite of Iris but also the exact same. Different because Victoria seems to be easily misled but similar in the way that Victoria will do whatever it takes to impress.
Not only are your characters loveable but they're realistic. Which is a very important factor when it comes to writing and unfortunately one that most stories lack which is why I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading this. You're both very descriptive with your writing, having a wider vocabulary than most.
I couldn't see any mistakes but that doesn't mean that there isn't any so make sure you read over everything before and after you post it :)
First off, those gifs made my day. That last one with Harry? Damn.. That poor kid. I think the idea of V and Nial together is cute, but I still ship Tori and Louis. Great update!
Her sister is just being a little bitch!She should want her sister to be happy with whoever makes her happy.She's doesn't even have a chance with Harry where Iris and Harry do.I can't stand that little brat.Someone needs to talk to her about that.Thank you for keep updating.Love this story!:D More soon please:)
I got super excited when I saw the update. Yay! Her sister needs to grow the fuck up. And you should act happier about updating for us. I love your story.
That gif was super amazing :) This chapter was great. It was nice to see Tori hanging out with Niall. But I'm still team Louis/Tori. I love me some Lori ;)
First off that gift is fucking awesome!:D Second this chapter was so much better than the last.I really loved how Tori and Niall got time to bond.I will say that I'm loving them together.I agree with Krystal-Khaos, I like Niall and Tori together more than I like her with Louis.Hopefully everything with Harry and Iris are going good next chapter and her sister just lets Iris enjoy herself.Though now I'm a little worried with what Niall said about Harry I just hope he can change for Iris. Update soon please!:)
I love this. And I especially love what's going on between Louis and Tori. It was nice to have so much to read through and I hope y'all update soon. I also comment a lot.. Comments for updates, yeah?
You were right that this chapter was cliche' but it wasn't bad.I like it well enough but her sister is really starting to kill everything.I hope she gets over this and just tells her to go for Harry. Update soon!:)