Christmas Dancing - Comments

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Oh my Gosh!! This was so so so so adorable!! I absolutely adored this! I thknk it was cute how you mentioned that people thought they were not meant for each other, but in the end they're happy. And I guess, that's what we all dream of having one day. So thanks for letting us dream and imagine! I LOVE ONE DIRECTION AND THIS STORY IS AMAZING!! Also nice layout.

Great story!

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Oh my Gosh!! This was so so so so adorable!! I absolutely adored this! I thknk it was cute how you mentioned that people thought they were not meant for each other, but in the end they're happy. And I guess, that's what we all dream of having one day. So thanks for letting us dream and imagine! I LOVE ONE DIRECTION AND THIS STORY IS AMAZING!! Also nice layout.

Great story!

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That was truly adorable. I've never had a great Christmas, so this story kind of makes me dream. Plus its really romantic. I dont think I know a person willing to go to a mother's house and ask for something. I know I'd be scared as hell. Well, a Merry Christmas indeed!

I thknk it was cute how you mentioned that people thought they were not meant for each other, but in the end they're happy. And I guess, that's what we all dream of having one day. So thanks for letting us dream and imagine!

Great stor y!

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Very well written with a nice layout. The plot is sweet and I'm in love with Harry you've created and it was just over all abot able. If you have any other works I'd love to read them!

aww I'm not a fan of one-direction but the way you describe Harry in this story makes him sound absoloutely lovely. I love it when she asks when hes going to change out of his one-sie and he says "never ever ever" this is well written and I like the layout as well. Good job!

From Band Fan-Fiction. This was very sweet. I don't read One Direction, or do anything One Direction related, but this brought a smile to my face. There's no major spelling or grammatical errors, but there is one factor that just made me cringe. A record player back in the 80's wasn't plugged in; you wound it up. It also can't switch songs like an iPod, the needle runs through the groove and you have to listen to a song through.

Other than that, it was delightful. I'm a bit disappointed that I wasn't able to see your custom layout, but it's not your fault that the photo was removed. Brownie points to you for having one though. You also get brownie points for fluff.

I love how childish Harry was acting, especially in the beginning of the piece. I'm sure a number of people can relate to the feeling of happiness on Christmas morning, and Harry really brought out this happiness really well, bringing a smile to my face.

This was such a cute one-shot. I love the little details that you added to this one-shot, like the details about the record player that her grandfather built, how Harry was still on tour, telling the reader, if we already didn't know, that he is in a band. I don't know, the little details just made me like this one-shot more. Amazing work.

I loved this endearing Christmas story! I sure would be surprised if I got what Katie did for Christmas, but that beats out any iPad whatever-numbers and other hi-tech gadgets of today.

The first line of your story = me.

And I haven't heard the name of one-sie pajamas in quite some time, but I would love for them to make a comeback! Excellent storytelling. I hope I can find more Fan Fictions like yours.

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First I would like to say, I'm not really a big fan of One Direction but this was amazing!!! I really do wish it had been a bit longer, only cause I didn't want it to end! I also like that fact that you used perfect grammar, which made me really happy. I enjoyed reading this and because I enjoyed it I even subscribed :)

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I used to really like one direction but not so much any more. Either way, I really like this. It's cute and even though I think that it could have been a tad bit longer, it was still perfect. I didn't spot any mistakes so good job for that!

I hope you keep writing

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So, I am really not a One Direction fan at all, but I have to say I really enjoyed this. You actually managed to draw me in with just the right amount of fluffiness, and I was thrilled by your use of correct grammar! Seriously, not enough people know how to use it these days. Anyway, brilliant job!

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So I really am not a Directioner at all, but I am not opposed to reading anything at all, considering you can always learn something from anything you read!

So I would like to compliment your use of grammar and elaboration because not many people on this site have very good grammar, even the ones who talk about people having grammatical errors. So I give you props there!

And I also wanted to tell you that I loved the layout that you had on this! I liked the color scheme and the little floral print accent on the sides, I thought it was cute.

All in all, good job m'dear c:

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Let me start off by saying that I'm not a directioner nor a big fan of one shots. The story was cute just not my thing really. I prefer more character development. Overall I didn't find to many grammatical errors or typos. Somethings seemed to be overloaded with cheesiness and some parts seemed like it was repeated in different words. Other than that it was a cute one shot.

I am not a fan of One Direction. But I did fall in love with Harry's voice when I first listened to Little Things. *blush*

Anyway, this story is waaaaaaaaay cute! I love the part where they did that little dance and Harry said all those sweet things to her. Oh my God! I could die! This story is short, and simple but so sweet. It shows two people who are truly in love with each other. It's perfect. ^_^

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first off, i love your layout; its so pretty and simple and who can not love Harry in a fake mustache?

I love the two different sides of Harry you get to see in this story; the sweet, romantic harry and the silly, goofy harry. It makes for a really good, funny, charming story and you definitely succeeded that.

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I'm not a big fan of fan fiction, even if I knew about the character it is directed towards, but this one sort of captured my attention. Your writing style is pretty good for a fanfiction writer. I think you might want to improve on more detail like how the Christmas tree looked like in the beginning but overall you're pretty good with description. One thing I did notice, though, was the dialogue but after reading through some other comments I can see that someone has already corrected you on that. =) Anyways, this story is interesting and I'm intrigued to see where it goes. Best of luck to you and keep writing! This story has great potential!

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I'm not a big fan of One Direction, and typically shy away from fan fictions but yours changed my mind on that! This was super cute and really good! Very simple but enough to make me go "aw" quite a few times! I really liked it alot :) good job!

Comment swap sent me here! I like your background! So first thing I notice, whenever you have dialogue that ends with a period use a comma if you are going to go on saying “he/she said” things like that. For instance you have:

“Five more minutes, boo.” I replied, pulling the covers over my eyes to block out any sign of light.

When it should be:

“Five more minutes, boo,” I replied, pulling the covers over my eyes to block out any sign of light.

I believe you meant once and not one in this sentence:

One unwrapped, gasped, and I felt tears well up in my eyes, “How do you even get a hold of this, Harry?”

Other than those, I really liked this. It was cute! :D

Comment swap sent me here! I like your background! So first thing I notice, whenever you have dialogue that ends with a period use a comma if you are going to go on saying “he/she said” things like that. For instance you have:

“Five more minutes, boo.” I replied, pulling the covers over my eyes to block out any sign of light.

When it should be:

“Five more minutes, boo,” I replied, pulling the covers over my eyes to block out any sign of light.

I believe you meant once and not one in this sentence:

One unwrapped, gasped, and I felt tears well up in my eyes, “How do you even get a hold of this, Harry?”

Other than those, I really liked this. It was cute! :D

Ah Christmas. This story is quite adorable and I can just imagine Harry doing all of this for me. Harry acted oh so sweet and I can't help but get jealous of Katie. There were some grammatical errors as well as typos and I know that it was around 1 am when you wrote this (author's note) but do make sure to proof-read so that other people won't get distracted by the errors. The story was cute and fluffy and in my opinion, is the perfect kind of theme for Christmas. :)