The Forgotten Princess - Comments

xxmonicaxx (100)

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looooovee this story

May 22nd, 2010 at 10:54pm

P I X I E S (100)

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I would very much like if you.could update alittle sooner

February 6th, 2010 at 02:01pm

IceChanter (100)

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I like the begining. I have only read the first two chapters at the moment, but the second one caught my attention. I will be following it. =)

I have one suggestion: try rewrite the prologue, because it lacks fluidity. It almost made me not want to read the first chapter (which I enjoyed quite a lot). Try not telling the entire background. Reveal it as you go. This will keep the readers interested. Perhaps the prologue isn't even necessary.

November 27th, 2009 at 05:48am

xXpunk_dancerXx (100)

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I really like your story! Don't give up on it! I would love to see you go wild with this story!

July 25th, 2008 at 11:56pm

vampgirl (100)

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Thanks!

April 26th, 2008 at 07:24am

electric-blue-hearts (150)

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I love your story. It's great!!!! Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

April 26th, 2008 at 03:44am