Devour my Soul - Comments

Layout / Summary

I like the icy colours you've got going on in the layout! t works really well with the whole cold feel of the summary, especially those last few lines. Way to hook readers in there. I'd definitely have clicked into this if I had noticed it on the main story page! Just a quick thing before I start (and this is my inner story editor coming out - sorry!), your title should be capitalised Devour My Soul to be in line with the site guidelines.

Content

When I first started reading, I thought that Hayden was the soul-mate and I was giggling so much at the mother thing. I very quickly realised he wasn't though, and that really hooked me right into this. I'm interested to find out who the soul-mate is, why they keep finding the narrator and why they are so anxious to avoid them!

Ooh, Evan seems like a bit of a jerk to start off with. I kind of dig the ~playa~ characters though because they always stir up everything and it makes almost everything they do so much more exciting because you just get this sense that there's an ulterior motive behind everything they choose to do.

I really like the idea of souls kind of being bound to one another that you introduce in the second chapter! It's interesting to think that a soul could be itching to be whole, or for someone to get together with another person. It's something I've always wondered about and I absolutely adore the concept as you've got it in this story. It's interesting to watch the whole hate versus love thing that's going in Ellie's head. I can totally see why she'd want to avoid him but at the same time, I wonder if it's entirely possible to actually resist it for that long.

I expected something to happen at the wedding! I wsn't sure whether it was going to be Hayden or Evan, but I didn't really expect a mixture of both! This is all shaping up to be terribly interesting so far!

Concrit

I don't think I noticed much when I was reading, really! This was a really good read and once I get more time, I'm going to come back and finish this off becauseit's a really interesting storyline. Awesome job!

Love it:)

I liked the story's title as well as the first few chapters. You just need to edit it a bit here and there but nothing too major. I have subscribed and I will be back to read more.

The paragraph of the perfect being in the summary made the story unrealistic, I would advise you to change it a bit.

love love love this story!!! definitely my favourite so far. I finished the entire thing in one sitting! I only hope that the sequel will be just as good! I greatly adored their love-hate relationship throughout the chapters, it's what got me hooked. But since the love-hate is now just love, I can't help but be curious of what the plot of the sequel will be like!

Yes sequel updates soon please I really like it

Very interesting! Two strong characters are always a plus :)

Aww, he un-ruined that moment by the last words he said. I'm so glad hes back. =) I can't wait to read more. Please, please, please, update soon!!

This is such an awesome story. I can never seem to get enough of it. I mean, it's the idea of it. I've never really though of an idea like this, and it's amazing. You're an awesome writer. Please update soon!! I can't wait to read more. =)

Okay, I started reading this story after you won one of my contests, but the story really struck me. It's unique without being over-outlandish, and you have a great vocabulary without being too wordy. The only negative that jumpe out at me at first (which is a really minor error, so it didn't detract from the story) was that 'fiancé', when referring to a female, should be spelt 'fiancée'. However, that is only a tiny thing and nothing to worry about. The chapters are a nice length, and they begin and end well. I've read through a few previous comments and I noticed that you said that you enjoy writing this story - I think it shows, as it is well thought out and doesn't feel rushed - I think you can always tell when someone has grown tired of the story and wants to hurry it along to the end, and you certainly have not fallen into that. I'm really interested by this story, so well done, and congratulations once again on winning the contest.

And this is the latest development. Just where did this Lauren come from? Why are they asking Selena to hide her? Please update soon! I can't wait to read more. =)

he is such a jerk why cant he have any feelings at least towards her

He really is kinda selfish, and he's just gonna let her walk out like that? He wanted her so damn badly in the first place and now he's sending her away. Geesh! I can't wait to read more. This story is so awesome, I just can't get enough of it. Please update soon!! =)

Oh my gosh!! I really want to read more. What is it with people and cliffhangers. I hate them! I can't wait to read more. Please update soon!! I wonder how she is gonna deal with actually killing a man...?

Can't wait:)

@ TaraJanee

Aw shucks! You leave the best comments!

Always leaving me feeling giddy!

XX

@ Usako

Usako:

Even though the world is fantastic, the characters are not.

You had me worried here! But as I kept reading I was like "phew!", she does like it! I love your comment more and more each time I read it! I love seeing what people have gathered from my stories, which bits they liked, and whether my writing is making sense! Sometimes it can be difficult to keep up the writing, and I hope I've been doing a good job so far! Thank you so much for the amazing comment!

@ Something.Of.A.Lie
Thanks! I'm definitely nurturing this baby ;) Trying to keep it somewhat unique!

@ narutogirl1994
Definitely gotta keep some mystery to the story! All questions will be answered in due time!

@ Shiznit
I'm actually quite proud I came up with it! I just kinda looked at the picture for a while and it just clicked into place! I'm a sucker for romances and fantasy... and soul mates were simply a concept that I've been wanting to work on!

@ Secrets.Are.Lies
Thank you so much! I'm enjoying writing it so I'm definitely going to continue it to the very end! I already have it all planned out! ;)

@ T.O.P Notch
Tee hee! Thank you! Such a lovely comment!! I hope your still enjoying it & are left satisfied to the very end!

@ Mikey Whiskey Hands.
Hehe! She definitely had to do something... and I hope her reaction was somewhat satisfying!

@ PoeticMess.
I'm glad you enjoyed it! The world does have a few little tweaks I need to make... and questions that need answering! But I really wanted something that's somewhat natural for them, but strange for us! The soul mate thing has been a little interesting to write. I do want her defiance to stand out, but as soul mates they literally can't help but fall in love :) It's just a matter of their journey, and how it affects their relationship!

@ IceDeath.
You never fail to leave a comment & I love that! I'm so glad you're liking the story! You keep me so motivated! I just wanna keep impressing you and surprising you!

@ steph_b
I'm glad you're loving the story! I update at least every few days when I can! Stay tuned!

@ Dani Paige
Thank you so much! I'm trying to keep this as entertaining as possible by not only building their romance, but also create an interesting journey for them to go through!

I hope the gun guy get's behind Evan and presses
the barrel to his head and then she sneaks up behind him
and whacks him with a lamp or something.

So Evan can't be made she disobeyed since she saved
his life. XD