You & I - Comments

I'm here as a judge for the Celebrity Fantasy Contest.

First, ahh you left the story on such a cliffhanger! I'm really curious about what's going to happen on this coffee "date" with Chris and Grace.

But anyways. I enjoyed the fact that this was just good, old fashioned "girl meets celebrity", but you added the element of them being friends and denying their feelings. It made the story line much more interesting and added a bit of a unique spin on things.

I liked Grace as the narrator, she is a really interesting person to hear the story through, and with all of her quirks and awkwardness, I feel like she's really easy to relate to. Of course not all of us run into Chris Evans and become his friends, but it was easy to see where she was coming from because her life wasn't really that extravagant before and nothing really changed because of his presence in her life.

A couple things I noticed. The first is that you use a lot of short sentences and not a ton of description, which can make the chapters feel pretty choppy. I know it's difficult to do when you write in first person (which I why I rarely write in it) but adding more description to things like the setting and the characters can help counteract that fact that you have a bit of a limit on how much you can describe things through dialogue.

The second thing is I saw you used quite a few sentences like this:
- Like how Bobby plays dubstep super loud when he's getting ready for work in the morning.
With the hyphen in front, and I feel like they really disrupted the flow you had going in the chapters. I think there's other ways that you can incorporate these "thoughts" (I'm not sure what else to call them ) without interrupting the flow of the chapter.

Overall, I think you did a good job with this!

AAAHHHH!! SHE SAID OKAY! THEY'RE GOING FOR COFFEE! oh god it's gonna be so awkward and adorable, I don't think I can stand it. I can't wait!

Glad you updated

He was just a man who could pull anything off and I did not appreciate that one bit.
I can also relate to this. SO VERY MUCH! Like I do not appreciate your superhuman ability, Chris!

I am honestly LAUGHING. "Do it for Fudge." Mhmm just for Fudge. That whole awkward conversation had me cringing because I've been in situations like that but I was also giggling. Like how silly are these situations. But what got me was Grace just attempting to avoid Chris the entire time. Who WANTS to avoid that? Am I right?
I get a little giddy every time you update this and I am still in love. Your writing is wonderful as always! This chapter had the perfect amount of sincerity and humor. My favorite.

Really enjoying this story. Update soon! :)

I love this story, and was so excited to see an update! I'm really excited to see how she handles working with Chris, and how he deals with her avoiding him! Keep being you, this story rocks!

So I died at the end when she saw Chris because now she has to work with him. Then I saw the gif at the bottom and really died. HOW IS IT ALLOWED TO BE THAT GOOD LOOKING

She wore one of those professionally smiles that masked any emotion festering underneath.
Why does this sound so ominous?

I am going to reread this story again and again and again because I love it so much
And at the end when Chris walked in, I was both like "Yes!" and "Oh god no!" lmfao. This is going to be good, I can feel it!

Do you still work on this? I sooo loved it!

I LOVE this story! Just found it, read all of it and totally fell in love with it! Grace makes me laugh out loud when I read her dialogue with others and herself! Can't wait to see what happens next! Amazing! xx

This story is still one of my favorites ever! <3

Such a great story!! Cant wait to see ehat happens with grace and chris! :)

ahhhh you're back <3 love this story, and i can't wait until she figures it out!

Glad to see you're back! Loved the update and I hope to see more later on!!

OHMYGODOHMYGODOHMYGOD!!! YOU UPDATED! YOU REALLY UPDATED!

I had to go back to read the last couple chapters just to refresh my memory, and YES! I loved this and I love that Fudge is back! Thank you for updating, I hope we'll see more soon!

I'm so glad you updated!! I can't wait to see what happens!

come back to me!

When will the next chapter be out??!

omg pls updaaaaaaaaaaate

Same here, read all of it in one sitting and I can't wait to see where it goes from here! Excellently written, the best I've seen on here so far.