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I NEED ANOTHER CHAPTER ASAP

Loved it! I can't wait to see what more awesome stuff you have planned for this

@ LoReedus
DRAMA IS MY FAVOURITE THING EVER!

Oh my, I can not wait!!!!

@ aequitas. Better than no hugs!!! Hahaha
I'll definitely have a chapter up tomorrow. There will be some crazy drama coming up

For now VIRTUAL HUGS!
I need another update

@ EmillyX213 Awww, thank you so much!!! I wanted to get another chapter up tonight but I didn't have the time. I'll definitely have one up tomorrow though!! <333

@ aequitas. You are seriously my favorite person on here!!!!! I want to fly to Australia just to give you a hug.

Sososo happy to see an update!! i love this story

AHHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE YOUUU

@ aequitas. Bahahahaha!!!!

YAY! FINALLY!

Im dying for an update!

I need a fix of this story soon
I MISS IT ALREADY

Updateeee!!

@ slashXdash Thank you for the advice!
I noticed I was doing that too. I used to write a lot in high school but it's been 7 years so I'm a little rusty. Okay, I'm very rusty. I do appreciate everything you said though!!
Also, I said it was awkward because my little sister is reading this hahaha!

Just read through your story and you're doing a great job so far! I'm enjoying it.
If I can offer a little bit of constructive-criticism though, I think you're using names too often in your sentences. Example; "Norman picks me up from under my arms and throws me on the bed. It drives me crazy when a man takes control. Norman crawls onto the bed but stops at my waist. Norman unbuttons my pants while looking into my eyes smirking. It’s a good thing I didn’t second guess on wearing sexy lingerie. I didn’t want to get my hopes up but with the way things are going, it looks like it’s going to pay off. Norman slowly inches my pants off my legs then throws them to the other side of the room. I sit up so Norman could take off my shirt which led to him kissing me at every opportunity."

There is a lot more examples, but I'm just saying that we already know WHO is doing the action. Instead of using his name so often, try "he", it's just reading Norman's name over and over again can be a bit much.

I also suggest spacing between paragraphs, it makes it nicer for the readers eyes. :)

Your smut-scenes, I must say, were well written (descriptive) and I enjoyed them. I didn't find the actions awkward, or forced, which is nice. The characters fit together well. :)
So while you noted it felt awkward to write, it did not come across that way and I'm sure your readers (like myself) were pleased with the outcome.

Woooo! update again soon! I think Her and Norman need to run into Chris together!

Haha this chapter made me laugh a lot :p And jealous Norman is cute lol. Excited for the next chapter!

@ LoReedus

Can't wait for the next chapter!

@ aequitas. Awwww!!!!
Thank you. I think you're my new favorite person