With Stitches. - Comments

Hi there, from comment swap! I think this is really well-done for the most part. I'm not one for fan fiction, but I really enjoy this. I've only read three chapters, but I think I have a good idea of the story. I think it's interesting that you have an OC and that she's from America--very different. On the other hand, I still don't quite understand why Dawson is there. I almost feel like you're purposely trying to be mysterious. However, this can prove problematic because readers may grow confused and frustrated because they're in the dark. My only real criticism is not to hide things from you reader. That's not to say you should tell them everything, but definitely at least give them a hint. Other than that, really well done. Your characters are spot-on, as is the dialogue.

@Lyrical_Miracle

It's no problem and I can't wait to read it once it's re-edited

@ hurricane.
I completely agree that I made them much too nice. I'm in the process of re-editing because I hadn't realized until I read it over again. Thank you very much!

From the comment swap.
I'm a huge potterhead, so I'm usually really picky when it comes to fanfiction about it. Although, I really adored your story. The plot seems amazing and the character interaction is pretty much perfect.
Keep up the good work!

I'm a Harry Potter fan and reading this actually seems interesting. I liked the story line, please update soon. c: ~comment swapper.

"offering me an old, callous smile " <--- favorite line, right there. So eloquently put. I could totally picture Lucius's smile. Now, I have a few nit picky things, but it's only because I am HUGE potterhead. I feel like you made Narcissa and Bellatrix a little TOO nice. They have this sort of awkward charm about them, but as far as Bella goes, kindness is not her forte. I think this is a nice story thus far and I look forward to reading more.

-comment swapper.

Comment Swap~

I'm a Harry Potter fan myself and reading this actually seems interesting. This story is flawless and well developed. I like the atmosphere it gives, especially how the characters interact. Keep it up my good friend! :)

djsakljfkjioh that was sooo good so far i can't wait for more!!!!!!!

*comment swap*
So I'm a huge potterhead and I really loved this fan fic! I got so excited when I saw the malfoys name in the summery! I love the way you write characters from showing bellatrixs and narcissas kindness to dracos annoyance. Something that kinda bothered me is why Dawson had to come to the malfoys in the first place. But other than that it's perfect! Keep up the great work!

Awesome story keep up the updates. :)

I'm sort of proud to be the first commenting 'cause this is really good!
The style is wonderful, the story flows perfectly, and I really like Dawson. You explore her character very well, and everything is just really nice so yeah :)
I genuinely just read this in one go in what felt like seconds 'cause I got so into it, and I can't wait for chapter 5 and 6!! Keep it up!