@ FanGirlGoneWild My writing confuses me too :c and I was actually hoping for actual criticism! So no, I don't anything you said was rude or nasty c: and yea, I fucked up with the P.O.V.'s a lot because im used to writing Kellic so some parts I put like vic instead of Mike and such. but thanks c:
I don't mean to sound rude or nasty but your writing confuses the fuck out of me because of your spelling and grammar, but I think you just need to proof read a little better, also I noticed a few of you P.O.V's were a bit mixed up and stuff. Like I said I'm not trying to be mean or to stop you from writing because your plot is good and I think you have talent, It's just some constructive criticism to help you improve :)
Awh don't worry dear, I'm working on the sequel as we speak. And look out for Chapter 11 and 12 I'll have it up soon, and it seems everyone LOVES chapter 12 :3
Well I'm glad you liked it c: