This is gonna be one of the best teacher/student stories on here. I can already tell. :)
February 18th, 2014 at 06:48pm
Part two of the Linkin Park gift!
This story does seem interesting. I'm kind of a sap when it comes to student-teacher relationships and I don't know why xD
I think the prologue characterizes Lyric very well. And they live in Greece! This is seriously the only story I've read with people living in Greece.
Chapter one was interesting and I could tell there was some foreshadowing. There was a slight grammar mistake. Somewhere in there you have "another rperson." The r in front of person is a bit random xD
There's really nothing else I could say since very little happened. I'll be subscribing for more, though :)
And just a side note (this doesn't really have anything to do with the story itself): I checked the characters section and you have Lyric standing as 5 feet 13 inches. That's grammatically incorrect. It should be written as 6 feet 1 inch. Just thought I should mention it :)
I can't really decide how I feel about this just from the first two chapters, mainly because I feel like not that much happened. I liked the background information about her family and how she moved in the first chapter, though! That's always nice, having information about previous events and why the main character is now where they are. I feel like your main character may need a little bit of work though. She seems like a bit of a Debby Downer or a Negative Nancy - it seemed like she was often throwing herself little pity parties. Don't mind me though, I'm a bit of a Positive Polly. Sometimes too much for my own good. 
Nonetheless, you got a very nice, informative start and that's something I very much enjoyed. I can't wait to see what you've got in store for the reader next! 
