Thief of Kisses - Comments

This is gonna be one of the best teacher/student stories on here. I can already tell. :)

Part two of the Linkin Park gift!

This story does seem interesting. I'm kind of a sap when it comes to student-teacher relationships and I don't know why xD

I think the prologue characterizes Lyric very well. And they live in Greece! This is seriously the only story I've read with people living in Greece.

Chapter one was interesting and I could tell there was some foreshadowing. There was a slight grammar mistake. Somewhere in there you have "another rperson." The r in front of person is a bit random xD

There's really nothing else I could say since very little happened. I'll be subscribing for more, though :)

And just a side note (this doesn't really have anything to do with the story itself): I checked the characters section and you have Lyric standing as 5 feet 13 inches. That's grammatically incorrect. It should be written as 6 feet 1 inch. Just thought I should mention it :)

More soon please

I say you keep writing it, I wanna continue to read it...bad. Thanks

I say you keep writing it, I wanna continue to read it...bad. Thanks

Everything about this so far has made me think deeply. I can relate to so many sentences in your story so far and I've never had that with other stories before, I really enjoyed this and I really want to read more!

Student teacher stories are seriously so cliche, but I love them so much. I can't really decide how I feel about this just from the first two chapters, mainly because I feel like not that much happened. I liked the background information about her family and how she moved in the first chapter, though! That's always nice, having information about previous events and why the main character is now where they are. I feel like your main character may need a little bit of work though. She seems like a bit of a Debby Downer or a Negative Nancy - it seemed like she was often throwing herself little pity parties. Don't mind me though, I'm a bit of a Positive Polly. Sometimes too much for my own good. Maybe have something happen that she gets her mind off of her ex-boyfriend? She seems to be a little more than hung up on him which is fine to mention, but I felt like it was a bulk of the chapters. Like in the second chapter, it's like she was all excited about this dude in her house perhaps taking her boredom away, but then she falls asleep thinking of her ex? Man I don't know about her but I'd be thinking of that other stranger guy. Nonetheless, you got a very nice, informative start and that's something I very much enjoyed. I can't wait to see what you've got in store for the reader next!

I'm really looking forward to more of this!

I really like how the story is going so far. I can't wait and see how it plays out!

Started really strong. Good.

This is a good start to a potentially great story. I appreciated the background information about the main character and the first chapter was pretty interesting. The character herself seems fairly relatable, even if a little cliche (girl from broken home has commitment issues) and hopefully she'll develop really well.

Your writing is generally good though some phrases just don't sound right (such as "My parents had taken a divorce" - should really be, "My parents got divorced" for example) and at times it felt like there wasn't enough description. But overall I think you're doing a good job :)

I love this. Teacher/student stories are my guilty pleasure, and this is the first decently written one i've stumbled across in awhile! :)

The layout is just gorgeous. It must have been really rough to deal with her parents like that while her sister left her there. I thought you started out very strong with this story, and I don't think that you should stop writing it. It seems really interesting. :o

I simply love this. <3 What an unexpected meeting. O.o This story keeps getting better and better. Way to go. XD

I simply love this. <3 What an unexpected meeting. O.o This story keeps getting better and better. Way to go. XD

I liked the new title you gave the story. It's much better. The story is moving along perfectly. The bolded and underlined words in the summary stood out in a bad way though. It's just not appealing to the eye at all. There were so many of them too that is quickly became insignificant.

But keep going. You got a lot of good stuff going on.

update soon

rec'd and subscribed

rec'd and subscribed

Great chappy, thanks for updating. I look forward to more updates. thanks