No I think it's developing in a way it should, but remember that this is your story and you have to trust your gut to tell you which way you want to go. I thought it was great. The suspense got my heart beating and I can't wait for the next story. Sorry it took so long to reply, my teachers decided that this week if the perfect time to make everything due. :(
Keep it up, but just remember not to rush yourself. Your readers are on your terms, and they'll wait. Hope that helped. :)
What I meant with "lightly" is that many stories on this site have characters who never really fight against the attraction they feel towards their relative. They may put up resistance as a show but we readers never see any emotion beyond, in most cases, lust. But your characters are developing into real people who behave, interact, and display emotion like real people, and we readers, at least, speaking from my own perspective, can really emphasize with then. Andy's need for drugs to dull his own conscience, Emily's equal horror and longing for Andy - displayed excellently in her shower scene- and even the boys and their real concern for their sister - contrary to a lot of other side characters I've read who blindly encourage the leads without thinking of the consequences of what they're doing and what it really means.
Okay, so I'm blabbing, but my point is you write with an understanding of what insect is and what it means in our society, and deal with Andy and Emily's struggle expertly. We can feel that they love and want each other, but also their struggle and self hatred about these feelings. You don't take the easy route like many authors that right about unseat but go into the dark side of a topic that many take too "lightly." I'm just glad you're one of the authors that trying to write a true and emotionally story, and succeeding beautifully. Wow, gotta take a breath there, ranting again. So, yeah, that what I wanted to say. Keep writing, keep your characters developing, take pride in your work (wow now I'm sounding like my English teacher) and please please please finish this story!
Aw, her brothers were just trying to help and she pushed them away! Though I'm not sure what anyone would do in that situation, I don't think I would disclose what's happened. But the boys obviously care about Emily. The bit with Andy at the end really freaked me out. It's becoming really dark, but I'm absolutely loving the story. Next chapter sounds interesting, if a little terrifying, but I look forward to reading it anyway! <3
I love how this is written. I have a strange appreciation for the fact that you write in third person omniscient which is so rare on mibba from what I've seen.
I also like that what both Emily and Andy are actually aware of how unhealthy and immoral their relationship- even if Andy is a little more willing to ignore that fact, but hey, guys think with their penises sometimes... whatever :/- which is so, SO rare on mibba! ("I'm hot, you're hot, let's fuck... oh wait, your my brother/sister/cousin? Oh well, it'll be our little secret and we'll live happily ever after!! ;D" um, how about NO!) It adds a level of authenticity that is severely lacking in most incest stories on this site. Good job!