Cursed Twins - Comments

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First. This reminds me of twitches or the lying game. The way they don't live together and have different personalities on a polar opposite level.
Second. Check your spelling/grammar.
Third. You can eliminate a lot of internal dialogue, don't act like the characters know everything. Also, don't force it too much.
I like the idea, you really have thought it through but personally this story isn't my taste. It has potential and I really love the way you named your chapters though. It's kind of poetic.

Response first: lol I shall stay for the whole thing. The 97% is just my favorite part, if I didn't like the other 3% I would even bother to read epilogues. Story: So, Matilda's friends wanted her to dress like her slut sister, huh? I was so done at that part, if there weren't other people in the room I would have just started laughing my really weird laugh. So the uncontrollable urge to kiss someone? Never really heard that before but the next time I see a really cute guy I know what I'm doing. Finally I'm the only commenter either!

i love this story <3<3<3<3<3

I'm so jealous you're out of school already! After tomorrow I have two more weeks, with the last being dedicated to exams. :( Oh, well. So, Larkson. There's something up with him isn't there? It seems that y'all just keep making me have more questions, and never answer any of them! Blah, so I have to stay until I have at least 97% of them answered. Well, any who I liked it, again. I really like how both of them are developing, I can relate to them both, though I do find myself having more in common with Matilda.

This chapter so made up for the wait. It was absolutely beautiful, if I could marry this chapter I would. xD "...I seriously do need help..." "You're right, you do need help." Best part, I weak from their conversation, and I can't wait to see more of Cam.

Uggggghhhhh! Why! Why, must you torment me so? My soul feels like you torment me on purpose, but I know you don't. So I wonder how they're both going to react, and if Matilda's like so this is why that guy thought he saved my life. Hahaha I can't wait to see how they react to the other being the polar opposite.

I should've remembered she didn't have a roommate. Epic fail on my part. But, as always lovely chapter, I understand it has to be short but I was like "No you can't just stop there." I swear I am addicted to this story, just trying to fit all the puzzle pieces together. So what is he doing in Colorado? I know this is not a coincidence, because if this story had taught me anything it's that there are NO coincidences. So, now my mission is too sit here and figure out the reason for everything, and be horribly wrong when it is all revealed.

aww shit!!!! so exciting!!!!

So might this roommate be the mysterious boring sister. Polar opposites, no idea how that happened, it couldn't be because they were raised on different sides of the country, could it? Hmmm. Naw that couldn't possibly be the right answer. Joking aside another wonderful update. When you said I cracked you up, I was like "What did I say?" So when I finished reading I came back to my comment and was like "Hey that is pretty funny. Good job me" lol

This mysterious boy...hmmmm...I like his attitude. lol. I bet they're frustrated, it's just "like here's your birth certificate which will lead you to no real answers, but might make you feel better."

Good update. I can't wait for the twins to finally meet.

Freaking amazing. The idea is truly unique. I wish I had it first, lol.

Loving it so far!!! So intriguing!!!

This idea sounds pretty cool- good starting point, not telling us too much but interesting me...this has potential, I think. Carry on. :)