This is seriously the cutest idea ever for a story and I so wish I had thought of it! Jealous over here Natalie is absolutely adorable! I love how she's this hopeless romantic type and she's just so intrigued by the story behind this bracelet. No, how could Evelyn call dibs first!? That seems so unfair for poor Natalie ): But my evil side is just thinking. "Yay drama " Oh my gosh, and then Jackson calls dibs on Natalie! What a twist! Even more yummy drama coming my way. Aww and poor Gabe ): He lost to Jackson!
Ahhh, absolutely love every update! I'm surprised Evelyn wasn't completely furious at Jackson's reaction to Natalie, but that embarrassing scene was just ace.
I am pumped you updated this. I really liked this insight between which ever girl this is because it shows that from the get go one of them would be deemed more socially accepted by everyone else (which always seems to tear apart friends) loved, loved, loved it! Update soon!
I love the first chapter. I love the introduction to the main character, with all of her quirks and all of her little intricacies! They make me feel a little less weird. But the way that she talks about him.
Transitioning from the prologue to the fist chapter is confusing. The POV change is difficult for me to handle.
I've read your writing before and I'm a huge fan of it. I think it's very clean and sophisticated. Your descriptions aren't bland or boring, but precise and lovely. You know how to write and you know how to write strongly.
I also love your layout. That's a no brainer, but I love it no less. I also really really love the concept of dibs.
Gabriel sounds beautiful. And Jackson does too. They all sound awesome and I love the fact that the idea is so simple and juvenile. "Dibs" is something i did in like...third grade and I think it's funny that you managed to put this into a story and not have it come across as completely cliched.
The only critique I have is that I don't understand the entire POV switching. Is it her point of view in first person?
This story ugh. Right now I feel like Natalie and Gabriel are cute but then I think that him and evelynn should be together because best friends growing up and kindling? a romance is always amazing.
Once again, your layout is gorgeous. The summary wasn't too long or too short, and it made me interested in the story. I think the first chapter was a bit on the short side though, but that's just fine. I like your characters, you've built them up well. You've done a fabulous job.
I feel like theres a lot more too Natalie and Evelyn's relationship that we don't know quite yet but then I also think I'm probably thinking way into this Loved it as always, update soon!