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  • hearts;

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    I miss this so muuuuccchh.
    May 3rd, 2014 at 06:52am
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    This is seriously the cutest idea ever for a story and I so wish I had thought of it! Jealous over here File
    Natalie is absolutely adorable! I love how she's this hopeless romantic type and she's just so intrigued by the story behind this bracelet.
    No, how could Evelyn call dibs first!? That seems so unfair for poor Natalie ): But my evil side is just thinking. "Yay drama Weird"
    Oh my gosh, and then Jackson calls dibs on Natalie! What a twist! Even more yummy drama coming my way. Aww and poor Gabe ): He lost to Jackson!
    August 6th, 2013 at 05:03pm
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    mYSTERY I MUST KNOW WHO YOU ARE OMG
    August 2nd, 2013 at 08:33pm
  • deathXbeforeXdisco

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    I wish I could recommend this more than once... ^_^
    June 24th, 2013 at 08:02pm
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    AW JACKSON'S KINDA SWEET WITH NATALIE AROUND
    but then again it's Natalie, soooo.......
    June 23rd, 2013 at 07:48am
  • hannahlovex3

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    its soooooooo good! I was just wondering who Joshua was in the last sentence?
    June 22nd, 2013 at 04:27pm
  • State Of Grace

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    Awww! This was a cute chapter from his point of view of Natalie. Update soon!
    June 22nd, 2013 at 06:48am
  • hearts;

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    Ahhh, absolutely love every update! I'm surprised Evelyn wasn't completely furious at Jackson's reaction to Natalie, but that embarrassing scene was just ace. Ha Ha
    June 17th, 2013 at 07:29am
  • State Of Grace

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    Oh my god I would be completely mortified if that happened to me, specially in front of a cute guy. Loved it, can't wait for the next update!
    June 17th, 2013 at 07:13am
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    WELL IT'S NOT LIKE IT WAS NATALIE'S INTENTION OR FAULT
    oh does Evelyn REALLY wanna protect her forever is she sure????? hMMMM?????
    June 17th, 2013 at 06:27am
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    AHHHH OH MY GOODNESS
    and I also love how you alternate updates with the mystery girl
    and I'm just wow
    I'm super excited
    June 10th, 2013 at 11:10pm
  • State Of Grace

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    I am pumped you updated this. I really liked this insight between which ever girl this is because it shows that from the get go one of them would be deemed more socially accepted by everyone else (which always seems to tear apart friends) loved, loved, loved it! Update soon!
    June 10th, 2013 at 07:20am
  • Little Robyn;

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    I love the first chapter. I love the introduction to the main character, with all of her quirks and all of her little intricacies! They make me feel a little less weird. But the way that she talks about him.

    Transitioning from the prologue to the fist chapter is confusing. The POV change is difficult for me to handle.

    I've read your writing before and I'm a huge fan of it. I think it's very clean and sophisticated. Your descriptions aren't bland or boring, but precise and lovely. You know how to write and you know how to write strongly.

    I also love your layout. That's a no brainer, but I love it no less. I also really really love the concept of dibs.

    Gabriel sounds beautiful. And Jackson does too. They all sound awesome and I love the fact that the idea is so simple and juvenile. "Dibs" is something i did in like...third grade and I think it's funny that you managed to put this into a story and not have it come across as completely cliched.

    The only critique I have is that I don't understand the entire POV switching. Is it her point of view in first person?
    June 8th, 2013 at 12:46am
  • Dodger

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    I really like this :)
    May 15th, 2013 at 11:23pm
  • lumy.

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    Natson? Jatalie? I ship that.
    May 4th, 2013 at 05:05am
  • State Of Grace

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    This story ugh. Right now I feel like Natalie and Gabriel are cute but then I think that him and evelynn should be together because best friends growing up and kindling? a romance is always amazing.

    Loved it, update soon!
    May 3rd, 2013 at 07:11am
  • vices

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    AWWWWWWW SHIT AWWWWW SHIT
    SHIPPING NABRIEL FOR LIFE YO
    HARDCORE
    May 2nd, 2013 at 06:07am
  • RaeStardust.

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    Once again, your layout is gorgeous. The summary wasn't too long or too short, and it made me interested in the story. I think the first chapter was a bit on the short side though, but that's just fine. I like your characters, you've built them up well. You've done a fabulous job. Cute
    April 27th, 2013 at 08:26pm
  • hearts;

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    Oh my god, this story is so adorable. I love everything about it, keep going! Very Happy
    April 25th, 2013 at 10:05pm
  • State Of Grace

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    I feel like theres a lot more too Natalie and Evelyn's relationship that we don't know quite yet but then I also think I'm probably thinking way into this
    Loved it as always, update soon!
    April 22nd, 2013 at 10:56pm