At first I really thought this story wasn't gonna be for me, but I started reading just to maybe give you a feedback on the first chapter, but I gotta say I really like it. I really like the way you write too, you don't use too long sentences, rather short ones but it still kind of flows, so that's a really good thing. I will definitely continue reading, since I only just started now. :)
First of all I'd like to say you're a pretty good writer. Your style is very easy to read and isn't overly descriptive. I like the layout a lot, it's super pretty and I think the title is really good too! Definitely helps to lure you in I think. The only thing I don't like is the summary (both long and short) I don't like it when people just stick lyrics or poems in there instead of an actual story summary. I prefer to know what I'm getting into before I read it and that puts me off. Again, this is just a personal preference of mine, not technically a bad thing but it might get you more readers if you work on a good summary. But over all it's very good!
At first I really thought this story wasn't gonna be for me, but I started reading just to maybe give you a feedback on the first chapter, but I gotta say I really like it. I really like the way you write too, you don't use too long sentences, rather short ones but it still kind of flows, so that's a really good thing.
I will definitely continue reading, since I only just started now. :)
First of all I'd like to say you're a pretty good writer. Your style is very easy to read and isn't overly descriptive. I like the layout a lot, it's super pretty and I think the title is really good too! Definitely helps to lure you in I think. The only thing I don't like is the summary (both long and short) I don't like it when people just stick lyrics or poems in there instead of an actual story summary. I prefer to know what I'm getting into before I read it and that puts me off. Again, this is just a personal preference of mine, not technically a bad thing but it might get you more readers if you work on a good summary. But over all it's very good!