Invisible. - Comments

I can honestly say I like the story! I'm doing a comment swap and this is the best one I've read I hope u update it I'm looking forward to reading more! You described every with a lot of detail and the fact that you add a blood update for the main character is really cool, it makes me want to get to know the chick more

"Thayler Thorpe" or however you say it just makes me feel like I have a lisp and my inner voice literally read thw hole thing in a lisp. xD Is that at all relevant?

Hey! So I was wondering if you could like update again soon? I miss reading this!

Hi! This is a comment for comment swap and I really really really like your story! First, your layout is really beautiful. I was instantly drawn to your story because of the layout. I thought since the layout was interesting the story must be interesting too! I only read chapter one. And I hope to read more! I really like the part in the beginning with her "Current Thought of the day" and he "Feeling" and "Blog update" it kind of made me feel closer to the character! Overall, this was a really great story and I hope to continue reading it! Did I already say that? Oh well hahaha. I'm going to recommend and subscribe to your story! Thanks for writing this awesome story! I have to go now. Byeeee<3

It took me a while to start reading this (finals and all) but I'm glad I did. I'd recently fallen out of the cliche romantic thing, but apparently I'm back into it because I was like, "Oh boy, a singer!" xD

The writing is pretty smooth; however, there are some spots (mostly Chapter 1) that need some more work. Some sentences are either too choppy, or run-on, but it's not too bad to be very distracting.

I absolutely love kitties, and this layout makes me smile every time I see it. Fuzzy little kitty feeties. <3

But really, this is very cute so far, and I love how contemptuous the heroine is. I know we're only two chapters in, but try to really describe Sutton more soon! I think the only reason I know her name is because it's in the Author's Note (or maybe I missed it in the actual text). You did a pretty good description of those two girls in the lunch line, so I bet Sutton's will be pretty great.

Subscribing, recommending, and really hoping you update soon!

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A lot of people can relate to her character, which is a good thing. Well done :)

The only thing I can say is brilliantly done. It's a decent piece of work, truly, but you happen to use "As I," a lot. I know it's 1st P.O.V. but, just be careful of that little known writing disease..

I love it keep going this looks like its going to be a good story.

I don't know when you're going to update, but I'm hoping it will be soon because I feel like I'm going to love the romance here. THERE WILL BE ROMANCE RIGHT, IF NOT..

I'm kidding. But I really hope that the next update will be coming soon because I love it already.

Im glad comment swap led me to this story! i love that, although everyone seems to overlook her, she has that special bond with her cat that seems to make all the things she goes through, and thats a feeling i think everyone can relate to, the way she feels as though no one notices her, no one cares. I also like the fact that she has such a unique name, because it adds more mystery to her character, and really draws the reader in. congratulations on a fantastic story!

I'm sorry but the second I saw Thayer and Sutton in your question I thought of The Lying Game, sorry not sorry(: Yet again well written and to answer the question, I think they'll have an accidental run in and the grocery store or around the town or something like that(:

that was an amazing story. ohhh my gerrd! you couldn't get any better. i want that kitty!!!

Coment swap! I really like where you're going with this story so far. I can actually relate to the character because she's much in the same situation as I am, except my own family actually pays attention to me lol Also, i love the layout. It's adorable, and I really like you actually gave Lou a personality instead of him just being a cat in there; that's awesome as well, because not many people will actually give animals personality when anyone who owns one knows for a fact that they do have personality. Anyway, I like the start and I like how you gave your main character an original name. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more!

I really like this, I thought it was fabulous really! It's actually original for once! A lot of times reading fanfic just gets repetitive but this is original. Can't wait to read more! Oh P.S. I think this story is very, very well written. I can't wait to see what you have in store for this story. Also to answer the question. I think Louie will play a huge role for Sutton because it seems that he's the only one she can turn to in a way.

I like this. I think the name Sutton is a bit unusual for a girl, but it works. Louie's effing adorable, okay?
The summary really got me hooked, I like how Sutton's parents seem to forget about her, which isn't fair to her at all.
I think you've done good so far, I can't exactly sit here and tell you what you need to improve or on anything because I didn't see any mistakes. Good job!

I really like this, I thought it was fabulous really! It's actually original for once! A lot of times reading fanfic just gets repetitive but this is original. Can't wait to read more! Oh P.S. I think this story is very, very well written.

The summary sold it! I absolutely loved it because it gave just enough info to get me wanting more. Also note that I want her cat. I like this! I mean it's only the first chapter, but you've set it up wonderfully. I'm really excited for her to meet Thayer since she already dislikes him. Subbed and looking forward to what you have up your sleeve for this! :*

Oh my God! I feel for this poor girl! Her cat sounds like such a cutie! So what's up with her parents? What's up with everyone not paying attention to her? I am deeply interested in this and I hope you update soon!

Your details are simple and I love it. I'm not a huge grammar Nazi so don't worry too much :) this definitely deserves more attention.

I actually was about to read this story before deciding that I would take just one more look at the comment swaps. What are the chances of that??

Here are my thoughts: 1) Sutton Fair is an AWESOME name. Good choice on that one.

2) I feel like this would be a bit easier to read if your column of text was just a little wider. The way that the text breaks up is cutting off the flow of your words. Not a big deal, just- again- a thought.

3) You break your paragraphs and sentences off at nice places. It feels really natural.

I can't really say much about the plot because nothing has really happened yet. However, I think this has real potential.