Life, Love, Hope Lost - Comments

@ ItsMeEmily
Ahahaha! I was like "Why does it seem like I have seen this before?" And I know right!? I had a hard time deciding what to do with the translations too! Like I have a chapter coming up that's just like pure Spanish, soooooooo I'll probably put it afterwards =_=" *sigh* But YES! I can't wait to see where this story goes!

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
Okay good(: I may or may not have taken that idea from you(; and I was just kind of iffy if people would want the translation directly after what was said only in parenthesis or if the notes would be better. I'm really glad you liked it though!(:

@ ItsMeEmily
It was PERFECT! I found it really easy to follow! Especially that you put the translation in the notes after the chapter ;)

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
Okay so glad you love it(: I really wasn't sure if the Spanish would work between Sky and Dylan it was iffy for me. So it wasn't hard to follow? That was my big issue is how others would follow.

I REALLY enjoyed the HELL out of this chapter! ESPECIALLY the SPANISH! It was a nice touch! And then they made Danny WALK! The poor bastard <3 Loved. Loved. LOVED THIS :) And I'm glad Jorel is okay with SG now ...

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
So... I was just re-reading this and I realized in chapter 6: Time For A Family Meeting there's a line that signals a possibility of foreshadowing. That's when Skylar announces she's pregnant and the line was "'Really?' Jordon asked with wide eyes doing a spit take." I had totally forgotten that line but yea it could be some foreshadowing as what happened that caused you to be so upset.

@ Chopper-kun
So I finished the whole prequel. Check it out? It's called Love Hurts Us, Breaks Us, and Makes Us Stronger or something similar to that haha

@ dragon_slayer
No yea I understand now. I was slightly confused with the first comment but yea now I totally understand what you mean. I'll try and get around to fixing it today. It'll probably start with the prequel and I'll let you know when I finish it then maybe you could give it another try!^_^

@ ItsMeEmily
Oh, it's a sequel, that explains everything that I don't understand. ^_^ And no, I'm not reading this on mobile. Let me show one example :

"Faggots! We gotta go get Jay to start rehearsals!" I shouted to everyone who now hung out at my house. No one wanted to go back to Skylar's, yet at the same time none of us wanted to sell it. She left her house to our whole group.
"Where is he anyway? I haven't heard anything from him in a while," Matt said stroking Bella's stomach.
"Two possible options," George started, "either at his house or Skylar's."
"Or the bar," Danny had to add.

Okay, so this is the beginning of your story. It looks like a wall of words to me and it really hurts my eyes. So, what I suggest would be putting on space like this :

"Faggots! We gotta go get Jay to start rehearsals!" I shouted to everyone who now hung out at my house. No one wanted to go back to Skylar's, yet at the same time none of us wanted to sell it. She left her house to our whole group.

"Where is he anyway? I haven't heard anything from him in a while," Matt said stroking Bella's stomach.

"Two possible options," George started, "either at his house or Skylar's."

"Or the bar," Danny had to add.

So that way, the readers will find it easier to tell that different characters are talking. Maybe it's only me but when everything is piled up together, it looks like only one person is talking. I hope you understand my rambling. ^_^

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
Yes but at the same time she could have also made something else up. She really could have kept lying for another seven and a half months. Hell she probably could have kept lying for much, much longer because there is no guarantee at this point that the baby would even resemble Jordon at all.

@ dragon_slayer
Two things. First: this is a sequel. Second: Are you reading this on mobile?

Erm... I'd read as far as chapter one and I can't read anymore. It's so confusing and I don't know, maybe it's my slow brain or whatever. I really would appreciate it if you put a space in between the dialogues and the paragraphs. That would be so much easier on the eyes.

Right decision or not, she wouldn't of told Jorel if he didn't press on with the issue. Still hate her. She's still a whore.

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
I knew you'd love Skylar even more after that^_^

*Throws hands in air* I'M DONE WITH THIS GIRL!!!

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
Well good! This next chapter should be up late tonight or early tomorrow and you're in for a treat^_^

@ ItsMeEmily
Hahaha GOOD! IT'S WORKING!!

@ P!nkPunkRockBubblez
Haha it was a lot of sarcasm. I really want Skylar to be hated for some reason.

@ ItsMeEmily
I can't tell if that's sarcasm or not ... ahahaha I LOATHE her!