Diary of Alicia Thomson - Comments

AWWW!!!!! i feel so loved! love u toos!

yes she is hahahaha

awww......alicia is a lucky ducky poopy head!

wooo hooray to addiction lol
emily your always the first to find out ive updated lol
mainly cuz i tel you on msn but bleh
i wuv vu emily

im addicted

nah its ok i just aint decided wats gonna happen next i kinda just write wen sumtin comes to me

woooooooooo
sorry just kinda excited

well technically Gee mite not love him
nothing has been set in stone so to say

yay
they're in love
wooooooooooooooooooooooh

yes hooray for FRERARD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

YAAYYYY FOR FRERARD!

thankyouuuu

That chapter was so sweet!!!

yeah YAY FOR GEE!!!!!!

YAY FOR GEE!!!!

ok i will try that

MCR 4 Life:

to the person above i would like to make the point that this story is supposed to be someones diary and well thats the main reason the chapters are short
i like the way some stuff is on msn and emails and stuff thats another thing that makes it like slightly more personal plus its just the way i write

ok then. :]

i think i totally forgot about the "diary" concept. xD

but still, it is a tad rushed and clumped... instead of indirect dialouge, why dont you try direct dialouge? it helps add to the storys feel :]

to the person above i would like to make the point that this story is supposed to be someones diary and well thats the main reason the chapters are short
i like the way some stuff is on msn and emails and stuff thats another thing that makes it like slightly more personal plus its just the way i write

a intriguing plot, but the colors against the black are a hard contrast, you should make the colors less duller, so its easier on the eyes.. also, i wouldn't have so much of the story on MSN and such... you should go into a bit more detials to legnthen your chapters. :]

ok i am writing the next chapter........now